Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
And organization that gives people money to start their own small business
And organization that provides medical care to people in need
donating money to charities is one direct way to have a contribution to reducing poverty in our society. Amonge all philanthropic activities which we could do for people in need, such as provides food, medical care, facilities and that sort of things, in my opinion donating money to make a job for poor one, has a lot of advantages. The ensuing paragraphs explain my reasons for this position.
First, provides an opportunity for poor people to start their own business not only could help poor people to be self-sufficient, strong and independent, but also indirectly could help a wide variety of people in a society. one example could drive this notion home. if poor people who are supported by charities, start his job, for instance, cultivate cotton in farmland, some other members of that society could take advantage of this issue. To be specific, a farmer needs some workers helping him, some drivers to arrive his products to cities and sell them to factories which needed cotton to make clothes and so on. Therefore, in this way not only we help poor people to be financially independent, but also we indirectly make a job for some other people.
Secondly, providing job opportunity for poor people is one help for their whole life. To be specific, people who depend on charities for their foods, medical care, and their other vital needs, are so vulnerable. In other words, what will happen for these people if charities give up supporting them or alter their strategies and devote the money to other philanthropic activities? Of course, they will get into troubles in this catastrophic situation so, they need continuous support during their lives time. However, charities can devote one money in one time to open up a new business for people in need and then they could develop their job by hardworking and the charities could focus on other poor people.
In conclusion, if I want to put some money to charities, I prefer to provides a chance for poor people to open up their job. this is because it is one support for their whole life and not only help them to become self-sufficient but also provides indirect jobs for other people in that society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, of course, sort of, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83064516129 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71170745556 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475806451613 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9153245583 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.8 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4666666667 5.45110844103 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245423504668 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105964819187 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062474717032 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179272710178 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225752500053 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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