Increasingly, robots and computers are being used to do work that humans once had to do for
themselves. Some people believe the effect of this change will be mostly positive and helpful for
humans. Other people believe that robots and computers will take too many jobs away from humans
who are currently paid to do them.
Which view do you agree with and why?
We are living in a sophisticated age computers and robots have a profound impact on one’s life. Governments are always trying to make people’s live more delightful, convenient and successful. Some people believe that robots and computers have positive effects on individual’s life. However, others take an opposite point of view and believe that these facilities will take too many jobs and are able do something that once could do it. After carefully pondering it from different aspects. I strongly and without any doubt agree with the latter idea. There are some reason the most important of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, jobs play a significant as well as fundamental role in people live. As a matter of fact, it is an obligatory task for each government to provide many job opportunities for their citizens. To illustrate this fact, one needs only to refer to the numbers of people who miss their job by using of robots and computers. Seldom are people able to find a decent job easily if government use these devices more. What results from using computers and robots are to discourage employees to keep on their job. Although some robots are able do something that human being can not to do, governments should not use them much that occupied people’s place. The noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that the high percentage of countries where use more computers and robots in their factories or companies, are the country having job problem. As a result, using robots and computes in industry may result in most people miss their job and increase the ration of unemployment.
The second reason why I agree with it is that great relationship among co-workers are the best characteristics which most companies are able to benefit it. Nowadays, so important are relationship and collaborative that all governments emphasis on them which enable companies to increase their productivity. Therefore, if companies use robots and computers more, they cannot make great relationship among workers because there is no person to talk with them. The modern world offers abundant examples people who are prosperous due to having great relationship in their work media. So, if I were to be a determiner in our country, I would have not allowed the companies to use more computer and robots. In addition to aforementioned notes, there is a well-known proverb in Persian, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this’ the more company use the robots, the more you eliminate emotion among workers”. The proverb also clarifies the fact that emotions and senses are the most important part of people’ life that robots can not understand it.
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous negative positive effects of using robots and computers on people live. Not only are they able to limit people’s job opportunity, but also they lead people to experience job that lack of any relationship. For this reason, I highly recommended that governments should use the computers and robots when they do not have any problem to provide job for citizens.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 452, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ble do something that once could do it. After carefully pondering it from different a...
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Line 2, column 329, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'Seldom' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: Are Seldom
...r job by using of robots and computers. Seldom are people able to find a decent job easily...
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Line 3, column 223, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...relationship and collaborative that all governments emphasis on them which enable companies...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, in addition, as a matter of fact, as a result, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2651.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08829174664 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93221974311 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481765834933 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 847.8 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9340656583 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.04 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.84 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349217335075 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104561075542 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864789177361 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23408114962 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836762243549 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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