Working at home using computers and telephones is better than working in office.
We are living in a sophisticated age job and working condition have a profound impact on individual's life. People are always trying to make their lives more convenient, delightful and successful. Some people believe that working at home using computers and cell phones is better than working in office while others are convinced that working in office is better than working at home. After carefully pondering it from several aspects, I do strongly agree with the latter idea. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, it is undoubted that, collaboration with co-workers could increase people's knowledge. As a matter of fact, they are able to deal with problems easily compared to they work alone at home. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to the numerous prosperous people learning wide variety ranges of comprehensive knowledge with cooperating others in office. Although some people might earn more money when they working independently, what results from working others are to find much more job opportunities with being in office due to interaction with others. The noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that approximately 90 percentage of people working in office, are ones who do not have any stresses to lose their job because small work can be influenced by external condition.
The second reason why I agree with it is that, obviously, having a great relationship provides people to experience interesting life. In fact, after stressful and boring day of working, releasing stress is really overriding. Hence, having friends who have a sense of humour enable people to have fun an also make a memorable and enjoyable day. The modern world offer abundant example of people who are healthier physically and mentally in their lifetime. Thus, working with others brings them several lucrative consequences such as having a healthy life style without any stress. Were I be a determiner in our country, I would have established a centre to provide team-work for people. There is a well-known proverb in Persian, the most equivalent of which in English may sound like this" the more you have friends, the more you would have longer life".
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous positive effect of working in office on people' lives. Not only are they able to increase their knowledge and become learned person, but also they enjoy having great friends and experience healthier life. For this reason, I highly recommended that people attend work which bring them several lucrative consequences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 90, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ing condition have a profound impact on individuals life. People are always trying to make ...
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Line 3, column 300, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('also') instead an adjective, or a noun ('make') instead of another adjective.
...nse of humour enable people to have fun an also make a memorable and enjoyable day. The mode...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, really, second, so, thus, well, while, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18224299065 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77781237544 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556074766355 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2248770964 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.9 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271102672425 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768673182561 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139421069404 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186081957092 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144307336311 0.0645574589148 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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