Independent
In the modern world where a myriad of books and a plethora of TV shows are dedicated to the topic “How to raise a child”, it’s still a great subject of debate whether parents should or should not establish strict rules for their children. To a question so formulated, some people, I suppose, would nod approval, while others might give a sniff of disapproval. As far as I’m concerned, I would definitely gravitate towards the opinion that making children obey their parents without giving the freedom of choice is not the wisest strategy to adopt while bringing up a child. My opinion is informed by the considerations which the paragraphs below will spell out in greater detail.
To begin with, we should agree on the dictum that the mission of parents is to get the children ready for the adult life by teaching them the skills to “survive”. Moreover, we should also agree that one of the most indispensable skills in one’s social life is that of making choices independently. To put it otherwise, the ability of making rational and sensible decisions is a “know-how” which must be developed since the early childhood of an individual. As a matter of fact, the only way of forming that very ability is to give the children a certain level of autonomy and don’t make them follow the strict rules meticulously. For instance, my mother has always gave me the opportunity to choose what I eat, dress even when I was 3 years old. When I grew older she let me decide what subjects I want to take or what university I want to apply. Consequently, I learnt to make intelligible life choices and take the responsibility for that.
To reveal yet another aspect of my stance, I insinuate that making children follow the tough rules has two major grave impacts on their personality. First and foremost, their individuality is being ignored and underdeveloped which in its turn make them feel not enough self-confident. As a result, they grow up with no belief in themselves and always in lookout of someone to take the charge of them. Furthermore, children who are always under a pressure are more keen to be aggressive towards the parents and the surrounding. This is to say that the supreme control over the youngsters might germinate resistance in them which, I believe, can lead to a unhealthy relationship between the child and the parent.
In conclusion, the spectrum of opinions people may entertain regarding whether parents should make the children obey the “rules of the game” can be extremely wide. As much of this essay has tried to demonstrate, I am convinced that giving the children some autonomy is more beneficial as they grow up to be more independent and self-confident adults with healthier relationships with their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: given
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, while, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2337.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9829424307 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09858211506 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543710021322 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.4152310341 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.833333333 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0555555556 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0555555556 5.45110844103 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0244116224193 0.236089414692 10% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00704221225484 0.076458572812 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0290357849647 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0232551332014 0.150856017488 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402790722417 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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