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In the modern world, where people are in a constant rush after the clock hand, do we dedicate some of our luxurious time to the community? To a question so formulated some people, I believe would give an overt sniff of disapproval, some others might nod approval while some would simply show a callous indifference. As far as I’m concerned, I would gravitate towards the opinion that we, the youngsters don’t always put time and effort to contribute to our communities. My opinion is informed by the considerations which the paragraphs below will spell out in greater detail.
To begin with, we should agree on the dictum that in the modern world, where individualism and the egoizm are reigning over the humanity, we are over concentrated on our personal needs and often forget that world is not orbiting around us. Moreover, we seem to forget that we are particles of the society who have certain responsibilities as its members. Also, I have the solid impression that the value system has drastically changed during the last half century. Unlikez today, when everyone is on his/her own, people used to be “One for all and all for one” a few decades ago.
For instance, my old friend Roger, who was born and lives in France for almost 80 years, has endless stories about his volunteering years in the community youngsters’ clubs. He enjoys telling how they were gathering together every week to organize charity and entertaining events for the community. For me, he is a shining example of a person who truly cares for the environment and people he is around. However, I should sadly admit that I don’t know many “Rogers” among my friends and colleagues.
To reveal yet another aspect of my stance, I insinuate that the breathtaking pace of the modern world seems to have entirely immersed us and sometimes, objectively, we don’t have even a spare minute to dedicate to the socium. To put it otherwise, our workload is so heavy that we have to prioritize our activities and as it usually happens, community-related activities are not ones of higher importance.
In closure, the spectrum of opinions people might entertain on this following subject can be wide and divers. And as much as of this essay tried to demonstrate I think that young people do not provide enough time to the community as a result of individual oriented values and extreme lack of time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 165, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... immersed us and sometimes, objectively, we don't have even a spare minute t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, i think, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95320197044 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98036172218 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588669950739 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.4676603925 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.6875 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.375 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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