It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent's jobs than to choosejobs that are very different from their parent's job.
It is inevitable matter that one of the main parent’s legacy for their children is their job and their skill. In the last centuries, many children, specifically boys, continued their father's job and convey their skill to their children. However, by changing the civilization and advent of new skills and new job opportunities, also extension of higher education by increasing the number of universities, many children decide to run out of their paternal job and choose a new skill. This new change in children's selection made a controversial subject between parents and children. In my opinion, youngers should select their own way and it is not compulsory to continue their parent's job, specifically in this new modern era. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is about doing favorite affairs. If a person do the job which is not interested in, he would not be succeed in that and it might bring him a lot of depression. This issue is also true for the children who had to continue their ancestral job. For instance, I have a friend named Ali who was interested in art. As both of his parents are medical experts, many people, especially his parents and teachers, expected that he became a good medical doctor too. However, Ali started his educational subject in a medical university due to his parents' force. After a while, he understood that he doesn't like this subject. He told this matter to his parents and they declined him severely. So, he graduated from medical school with low grades and now he is a depressed man who usually stays at home and doesn't do anything.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that many of the last decades' jobs are being extinct due to the technology enhancement and less people's demand for these skills. So, it is impossible for youngers to continue these jobs. For example, one of the jobs which had been extinct in these last decade is working as a post man to deliver letters. From the past twenty years till now electronic mailing has replaced the traditional mails. So, it is not impossible for a child to continue his father's job as a postman.
In conclusion, by extinction of many job opportunities and changing favorite subjects it is inevitable issue that youngers do not select their ancestral job and want to learn a new skill due to their interest and society's demand.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
... inevitable matter that one of the main parents legacy for their children is their job ...
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Line 2, column 628, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e. After a while, he understood that he doesnt like this subject. He told this matter ...
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Line 2, column 788, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...al school with low grades and now he is a depress man who usually stay at home and doesnt...
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Line 2, column 831, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...epress man who usually stay at home and doesnt do anything. Another reason which dese...
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Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... which deserves some words here is that some of the last decades jobs are being extinct due...
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Line 3, column 474, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...nal mails. So, it is not impossible for a children to continue his fathers job as a postma...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2002.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82409638554 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72833872462 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498795180723 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4731355769 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3333333333 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7619047619 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402936797197 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124728967846 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116352219093 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244629533172 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103062595666 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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