Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support you answer.
It is inevitable statement that many people, specifically male gender, must have a career with enough salary to afford the living payments. Some people state that it is not important matter to being recruited in a job position with low salary at first. However, believe that it is better to wait and seek more for a job which we are deserve in. I definitely agree with the first statement. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that although a person's first job position may not satisfy him, it will be an opportunity for enhance to higher levels of expert which can causes better job opportunities. For example, my father started his job as a worker with low salary in a dairy production factory. At first many people, such as my mother, blame him for his selection and stated that he would find a better career if he wait more. But after 3 years, my father became a manager in the factory. At the same time my aunt was seeking for a job too. But he didn't select any offered positions, and after 3 years he was an unemployed person yet.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that “money is money" whether under the hard stone or in your hand. This statement means earn money is more important than how to earn money. If a person wait until to find a suitable job position with a salary he has expected, then he will wait for a long time and maybe never reach that position. So, if a jobseeker lowers his expectations and select the job which offered him at the beginning with a fewer salary, he will earn more money than a person who expects to find a vacate job with high salary, less tax, suitable environment, good colleagues, etc. It is a calculus matter: two person who seek for job. The first one applies for a job with 2000$ per month and had recruited very quickly. The second person wait to find a job with 5000$ per month. He seeks for about 2 years and finally found this job position. So, let's calculate their earning after 3 years: The first person earned 72000$ in 3 years but the second man earned 60000$. This calculation is without considering this matter that the first man may be enhanced in his job position and being paid more.
In conclusion, I think in this severe economic situations it is better to earn money, even sufficient for living at first, than earning no money and wait for an ideal job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'deserved'.
Suggestion: deserved
...it and seek more for a job which we are deserve in. I definitely agree with the first s...
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Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...ce to higher levels of expert which can causes better job opportunities. For example, ...
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Line 3, column 437, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'waits'.
Suggestion: waits
...hat he would find a better career if he wait more. But after 3 years, my father beca...
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Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... aunt was seeking for a job too. But he didnt select any offered positions, and after...
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Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '”' seems to be missing
... which deserves some words here is that “money is money' whether under the h...
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Line 5, column 530, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...money than a person who expects to find a vacate job with high salary, less tax, suitabl...
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Line 5, column 644, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...gues, etc. It is a calculus matter: two person who seek for job. The first one applies...
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Line 5, column 706, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$2000'.
Suggestion: $2000
...b. The first one applies for a job with 2000$ per month and had recruited very quickl...
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Line 5, column 796, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$5000'.
Suggestion: $5000
...e second person wait to find a job with 5000$ per month. He seeks for about 2 years a...
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Line 5, column 949, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$72000'.
Suggestion: $72000
... after 3 years: The first person earned 72000$ in 3 years but the second man earned 60...
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Line 5, column 993, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$60000'.
Suggestion: $60000
...0$ in 3 years but the second man earned 60000$. This calculation is without considerin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1998.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54090909091 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45780927785 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490909090909 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.890154577 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8181818182 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59090909091 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238690351937 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831425085254 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443520820748 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161261355625 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043968217228 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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