TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
One of the principle parts of the educational system in all countries are person who teach and learn students. In primary schools teachers have this responsibility and in academic environments professors are one of the essential parts of education. So, many critics state that the teachers, both in universities and schools must be motivated enough to learn students better. They think that governments should spend a lot of money to encourage them in learning. However, some others state that this money can be spent for other purposes and might have better results of enhancing educational quality. I personally contend the latter. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons
The first exquisite reason to be mentioned is that it is better to devote more money for other educational Infrastructure, such as laboratory equipment, number of books in library, etc. These supplementary have more positive effects on education than motivating the professors by increasing their salary. Also, university professors can benefit more from these facilitations than the straight money which was given by university. They can do research projects for big companies and earn more money. For instance, I had a professor who had a big laboratory and did many research projects for industrial factories. One day, when one of my classmates asked him about his income and his salary, he stated that he doesn't need to his salary and he earn about 100000 a month by doing projects for factories. Also, he recruited most of his students in his laboratory and give them well amounts of money. So, the increase in Infrastructure has more advantages both for students and professors.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that there are some other factors which are not has direct relationship to education, but can enhance the education quality. For example, in most universities in prosperous countries such as United States, managers decide to establish some places for students' amusement. They think that these can help students to be more success in their studies. They make new athletic gyms, stadiums, theater halls, etc. just to make motivation in students. The managers believe that this can improve the education quality more than increasing the professors' salaries.
In conclusion, although teachers and professor are one of the essential part of the learning system, there some other bases which can be more effective than them on educational quality. Therefore, it is better to focus on them more than merely instructors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 710, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ncome and his salary, he stated that he doesnt need to his salary and he earn about 10...
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Line 4, column 743, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'earns'.
Suggestion: earns
...hat he doesnt need to his salary and he earn about 100000 a month by doing projects ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28292682927 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89386312452 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50243902439 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.320351812 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4545454545 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6363636364 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40909090909 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127762291856 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.039087151885 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349616482215 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0792008883113 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293981821816 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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