It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Flowing people has been continuing from country sides to cities for centuries. That is way, human population in the cities is much more than that in countryside, and many children grow up in the big cities. While some people believe that rural areas is much better than cities to grow up children, the others think that opposite is better. I feel that growing up in a countryside is better for children for reasons of health and social.
The first reason is that rural areas is much healthier than cities. In the country sides, people prefer to walk or ride a bicycle instead of going somewhere by car. Therefore, both the weather is much cleaner and both adults and children are healthy because of walking and riding a bicycle. However, that there are lots of cars in cities causes a great amount of air pollution with their egos. Besides, this pollution leads some respiratory diseases such as asthma on children, even in adults, since they have sensitive lungs. Research shows that diseases increase with environmental pollution.
The second reason is that country sides push children to be social. The amount of free land is high because rural areas are not filled with buildings; furthermore, these lands are the children's playground. Children talk to each other while playing together and socialize at the same time. Yet, cities are filled with gigantic size of constrictions, and the number of areas which children can play games are low. Thus, children often stay clogged in homes. Children who spend time with their tablet and computer in homes become unsocial because they communicate less than normal with people.
To sum up, health and socialize are my only two reasons why It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, furthermore, however, second, so, therefore, thus, while, i feel, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46670945909 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553333333333 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.5975309921 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6470588235 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6470588235 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325680958322 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10540546169 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110948466278 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236986286093 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132724861294 0.0645574589148 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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