Is it better to spend money on traveling and vacations or to save money for the future | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Is it better to spend money on traveling and vacations or to save money for the future?

Wealth has an abundance of functions, and we can utilize our money to achieve lots of specific goals. This will raise the question of whether people should spend their income on traveling and vacations or save money for the future. In my opinion, I will be willing to spend money on traveling and vacations.

To begin with, spending money on traveling and vacations enables me to broaden my horizon. For example, I would like to travel to other countries and discuss some political points of view with local people, such as the American inflation problem or the rise and fall of the British empire. I could use this kind of precious chance to understand how local people think about their government and policy. In addition, I will also spend my budget to explore a few historical attractions, like the ancient Roman arena or Greek remains. I could profoundly realize how a great civilization developed and declined by visiting those ancient cultures. By contrast, if I just choose to save income rather than use the money to travel, I would not be capable of broadening my international vision.

Second, allocating my capitals for traveling and vacations to relax from my extremely fatigued life. For instance, when I plan to arrange my vacation days, I tend to visit a number of alluring natural scenes, like Sun Moon lake or Green island. On one hand , I could totally immerse myself in appealing nature by seeing charming landscapes or listening to animals singing. On the other hand, I could utilize my leisure time to make plentiful treasurable memories with family and share our daily life. In contrast, if I choose to save money instead of investing my capital to travel, I may not be able to release those annoying working stress and enhance family bonding.

To sum up, these are the two reasons why I choose to spend money on traveling and vacations. For one thing, assigning our funds to travel and vacations could benefit us to step out of our comfort zone and broaden our horizons. For another, distributing our money on traveling and vacations could eliminate our working pressure.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 119, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...lots of specific goals. This will raise the question of whether people should spend their income on tra...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...n Moon lake or Green island. On one hand , I could totally immerse myself in appea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in contrast, kind of, such as, for one thing, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 11.0286738351 9% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89915966387 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65447355054 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557422969188 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.5214425619 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.882352941 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3529411765 5.45110844103 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375481828988 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134004829368 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114511596766 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26216726436 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084251452521 0.0645574589148 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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