:It is commonly believed that in life, success is not the most important thing; it is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fail. Do you agree with that idea?
Through the history, mankind has been always seeking for the meaning of life. In this vein, what the most noticeable and valuable thing is in life has been among the most controversial subjects and provoked many discussions. Some people keep endorsing the claim that success is the only thing which people should follow to acquire whereas others dismiss this idea. Personally, it is my firm conviction that happiness and the sense of staying optimistic is the most important asset that one can have. In what follows, I aptly elucidate what rationale my perspective is based on.
To commerce, happiness and hope are the only forces which help people to keep continue. To put in a vivid picture, life has both up and down sides and the path of being prosperous is not a smooth way. Therefore, it is crystal clear that everyone inevitably stumble upon obstacles and failures in their life. In this regard, the significance lies behind the fact that this not the end and they should not forfeit trying unless achieving their goal. My own experience is a compelling example of this notion. When I was applying to be admitted to well-known universities, my first endeavor faced failure. Accordingly, although I was despondent, however, I did not surrender because I was of the opinion that if I try harder and improve my abilities I would accomplish my goal. Thus, after enhancing my CV I could be admitted to a recognizable university. Had it not been because of being optimistic about future and relying on my skills, I would have lost this opportunity as I would give up after the first failure.
The second pivotal reason that bears in mind is that the past unsuccessful experiences has many lessons camouflaged in them that should be driven out, and this dose not happen unless individuals posses positive emotions related to them. In other words, although our trying may not end up triumph, but we have experimented many things in this path and even the reasons that have led to the failure can teach us precious things and pave the way of success in the next try. Mentioning my past example, since I regulated my emotions I was capable of analyzing my mistakes and figured out that I had to foster my writing ability. Not only it helped me to avoid submitting incompetent letters in my application but also does it foster my written communication skill which is a vital requirement for demanding jobs.
To put it in a nutshell, it is more important to stay positive and content in arduous situations. This is because it induces us to keep trying and not giving up after the first failure, and moreover, helps us to correct our previously made mistakes in order to cultivate some personal traits and skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 30, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has always been
Through the history, mankind has been always seeking for the meaning of life. In thi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2244.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8051391863 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74421807915 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528907922912 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1574774593 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.2 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.35 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115207243863 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0377172059076 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483950468844 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0787934743715 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593483094276 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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