It is commonly believed that in life, success is not the most important thing; it is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fail. Do you agree with that idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer be sure to use your own words Do not use memorized examples
Throughout history, people constantly have strived and explored various methods to become successful. However, they may have failed most time. From my perspective, being happy and optimistic in life is essential rather than being successful. There are numerous reasons to support my opinion, among which two stand out.
First and foremost, without having perseverance and optimistic viewpoints, people would not be successful. Clearly, having good vibes is an inseparable part of the characteristic of successful people. To be more specific, people always face difficulties and different problems in their path toward success, but they must be prepared to overcome the issues. In addition, when having an optimistic view toward the failure, they can easily turn the failure into a lesson by which they can become successful in the following endeavors. My personal example at the workplace would derive this notion home. Last year, I confronted a huge issue working with one of the specific software in the firm. I was completely disappointed and wanted to quit my job because of lacked my skills. I totally believed that I was stupid. After talking to my manager, I got good vibes to improve my skills by watching online tutor videos. My boss acted as an incentive to me to be optimistic and work harder to become successful. Had I not talked to my boss to retrieve my energy and had a good spirit, I would not still work here.
Second, when people face doom, they must make every effort to be hopeful because it helps them to preserve their mental health. To be more specific, Successful people constantly search to find a better way toward success. After each failure, they prime themselves mentally to start again without any excuse. In this way, they can get relieved and do not think about the loss. They just have a keen desire to try it, again and again, to become successful. On the contrary, when people are pessimistic about their goals, they always find reasons to put the blame on them and give up. Being frustrated after each fail can wreak their entire life, causing them to become depressed.
To sum up, considering the reasons and examples mentioned above, I believe that people should be happy and hopeful when they face a fail. This is because having an optimistic perspective about life is a prerequisite to success, and it also can maintain their mental health.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, in addition, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1993.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9825 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66171819508 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5375 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6561111794 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0416666667 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91666666667 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147570574024 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471325280317 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405189698263 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112757488451 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324447703072 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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