It has been announced that a high school in your community would refuse bad-record students. DO you support or oppose this plan?
Everyone makes mistakes, and therefore it is very hard to judge especially a student when he has a bad-record. Refusing those students could possibly aggravate his situation and make it only worse for the society as a whole. I oppose this plan and the reasons why I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, every human being is capable of making mistakes, sometimes those mistakes happen because of different reasons, some people are struggling in their lives, some people don’t have enough support and therefore they commit acts without thinking of consequences. Those acts are usually made without thinking what is coming next but judging a human, especially a student by his past deeds is could make his life miserable. For example, I had a friend that had a very rough life, his parents were alcoholics therefore he started to drink too, one time he broke into a house and he got in trouble because of it moreover he was expelled from school and couldn’t be enrolled in another institution, this made his life miserable because nobody was accepting him even though he changed his life. This example proves that sometimes it’s not the student fault and if he changed and really wishes to achieve something it’s wrong to refuse him, everyone makes mistakes but people are changing that’s why we should accept them.
Second of all, sometimes a student receives a bad-record only because of the company he has around him, some people are living in really bad neighborhoods where crime is higher and people tend to use drugs or substances to forget about harsh life. For example, I had a good friend that came from low income family, he had to work since he was 13 and skipped school too much, what’s worst he was so stressed that he started using drugs, he got caught and received a bad-record, but instead of helping him with his addiction everyone refused him. Time passed and he reconciled and became a better person but because he had a criminal record people keep refusing him at work and at enrollment into a university so he was forced to work harder. This example proves that sometimes people that come from a bad background shouldn’t be judged by their record, he was very smart and he was hardworking but he was declined everywhere because of a 1 mistake he made.
In conclusion, I oppose this plan because we as humans can make mistakes but we shouldn’t be judged by them all our life. People change and if someone wants to work hard you should give them the possibility.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, as for, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84174311927 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65890786846 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518348623853 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.7918463414 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.384615385 100.406767564 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5384615385 20.6045352989 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105685914288 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530263696876 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338773008006 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0865331064477 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333969233376 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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