A neighborhood is a space full of love and joy. there are Children playing outdoors, pets rambling, and lovely mothers working to make their own house a god’s place. So, what if the mayor wanted to build a great movie theater in my neighborhood? As far as I am concerned, it would be beneficial for all the population. Therefore, I will support this plan by giving some reasons in order to explain its advantages for my neighbors and my family.
First of all, it is normal to see people really bored in some neighborhoods, it is because there is nothing to do. I remember when I was in the school, I arrived at my house and after doing my homework, I hanged out with my friends to play football or basketball, but when that finished, everything turned really boring. So, if there had been a theater, we could have assisted and watched movies. Consequently, a theater will bring a new source of enjoyment for children in my town. In the case of young people, after working, they could go to the theater to chill leaving worries for a moment. So, this is how a space for movies can make people happier.
Secondly, there are always gifted people in each town who do not have enough resources to organize and arrange plays or concerts. So, if they had a place to perform what they are good at, they would be engaged to make a great job, and then to come up with innovative things, for instance, a musician would compose more songs because he would have a movie theater available to present his art, in the same way, a painter could bring his amazing paintings to the theater and invite his neighbors to see his job. To clarify this point, let me take myself as an example, I am a guitarist when my band’s new CD came around, we did not a place where to present it, we called some music agencies and sent our CD, but there were no dates available to perform in a scenario. So we got stuck without present our CD to the public. Accordingly, I consider that a movie theater can encourage artists to create new things because they could present them for free or for a little cost.
To sum up, there is no doubt that a movie theater will benefit my neighborhood, so I support it because it will bring enjoyment and because it will help artists present their masterpieces.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 49, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...orhood is a space full of love and joy. there are Children playing outdoors, pets ram...
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Line 3, column 574, Rule ID: WORRY_FOR[1]
Message: The verb 'worry' does not normally take the preposition 'for'. Did you mean 'worries about'?
Suggestion: worries about
...ould go to the theater to chill leaving worries for a moment. So, this is how a space for m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, no doubt, first of all, to sum up, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1868.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49038461538 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5949382838 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526442307692 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.2297441509 48.9658058833 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.882352941 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4705882353 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35294117647 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135380319214 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476756838925 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330577388299 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0941441655803 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235796065784 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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