It is important to keep your old friend than making new friends.
Friends are most important in our life in every happy situation or in bad condition. Everyone make new friends according to their needs and situation. Some of the people believe that we should not make new friends and always need to stay with only old friends. Though we should stay in touch with new friends but I believe in making new friends as well. I am not concurred with the idea of only keeping old friends and firm believe that we have to show our friendly behavior and make new friends as we go to different place. I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraph.
To begin with, people transfer one place to another and they can not stay with their old friends as they have to move because of their job, study or in any circumstances. Though they may be close to our heart but when it is about physical presence they can not be there. Only virtual presence can not complete their presence. Ultimately, new friends are needed for this situation. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. About two years ago, when I left my country for my further study, I was really unknown about the place. Furthermore, I did not know where to go for grocery and stores. But when I met a friend who was staying in my apartment, She fully supported me in every difficulty and it helped me to be familiar with university and daily activities. As a result, I did not face more trouble that international students face.
Secondly, making new friend ease us to understand various cultures, languages, society and places. Because of the cross culture and socialization, people can adjust themselves in different society which helps to build confident and personal growth. On the other hand, it increases our knowledge about people and society. As a result, people can communicate with each other and it develops harmony in society. Drawing from my own experience, Before five years, when I left my hometown for university, I met with a different community people then me in language, culture and many more. Majority of the people used to talk in their language. It was difficult for me to speak. But when I made a friend from same community, it encouraged me to learn their language, culture. Fortunately, within two months, I learned and adopted every sector of their society. Finally, they started to accept me in their community, more than that I got chances to share mine as well.
In light of above mentioned reasons. I strongly support the idea of making new friends to take help and to learn many more ideas about different society culture and people which may not be possible by our old friends because of the different circumstances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...situation or in bad condition. Everyone make new friends according to their needs an...
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Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...according to their needs and situation. Some of the people believe that we should not make ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2240.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73572938689 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64474002072 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471458773784 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.5882939782 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.962962963 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5185185185 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322659122394 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898111461271 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122320931554 0.0737576698707 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221631662231 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154921230995 0.0645574589148 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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