Imagine you could improve the town where you live by changing one important thing. Which of the following would you choose to do?
- Building additional park
-construct more libraries
-Improve public transportation
Most of people dream about doing things that are beneficial for the country or their town which can lead to positive impact to the society. If I get opportunity to change one thing among all three, I would improve the current situation of public transportation. To be more specific, I would make easy access of transportation, along with this, people should not pay any fare. I will develop my ideas in the subsequent paragraph.
To begin with, in current scenario, more people are compelled to buy personal vehicle because of the poor service of public vehicle that resulted into pollution, traffic jam, accident and many more negative impact in the society. If we could provide public transportation with more facilities like no fare, free internet, timely occurrence, we could attract attention of people to public buses. Ultimately, People start using public buses instead of their public. As a result, we could save money that is used for fuel and to buy personal automobiles, not only this, we would be successful to control climate change and traffic jams.
Secondly, though people are not capable to afford cars but they are forced to buy it using different plans. Its really hard for poor people who are living in low income. If they do not buy cars, they can not go for their work or any where. But easy accessibility of public vehicle could be precious gift for them. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by a country. In Germany, government has implemented pubic transport free of cost and people from their do not use their personal vehicle. To say more, students are more benefited by this facility. For this reason, government is successful to save more money that used to be spent in fuel and to purchase cars.
In light of the above mentioned reasons, I would alter public vehicle that is the current problem in US because of that many people are investing their money to buy personal vehicles.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
Most of people dream about doing things that are benef...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hange one thing among all three, I would improve the current situation of public ...
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Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: ANY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anywhere'?
Suggestion: anywhere
...cars, they can not go for their work or any where. But easy accessibility of public vehic...
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Line 5, column 446, Rule ID: PUBIC_X[1]
Message: Did you mean 'public'?
Suggestion: public
... In Germany, government has implemented pubic transport free of cost and people from ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, second, secondly, so, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83928571429 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61123700063 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53869047619 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8051701839 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6470588235 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82352941176 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156909052184 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0533300887321 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045224390689 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0998351858948 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477770988242 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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