It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Nowadays, as human's needs have increased more than ever, they need to meet their demands by being diligent and hard-working. As a result, they spend most of their time in the company or office. The question which arises here is whether working three days a week with prolonged hours would be more beneficial than working five days a week but with compressed working hours. I, personally, contend that working five days a week with shorter hours would be more pleasant and delightful for the employees. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
The first remarkable reason to be mentioned is that since socializing with others is a strong tendency of human, people need to satisfy this inclination by working nearly every day of the week. Socializing is proved to have considerable impacts on human's brain ability. In other words, one's brain will release dopamine, which not only will energize them but also it helps them to focus better as well as be motivated. Take a personal experience, when I was pregnant, I should stay at home as the doctor prohibited me from working. Thus, my association with colleagues, friend and families decreased, after a month, my mood changed, after visiting the doctor, I was diagnosed having severe depression, which also lowered my mental ability, so for escaping that terrible situation I began to have regular meeting with friends. Had I continued working, I would not have developed that disease.
Another equally important point is that people can dedicate the remained time of the day to other activities about which they are curious. For example, one may opt for going to art classes such as painting or photography, which will lead to creativity that also affects their performance in jobs. Some may spend time with family members or cheering out with friends. Therefore they can strengthen their bonds, which is necessary for today's life. Moreover, they can do regular exercises to keep their body in shape. Since people only live once and should enjoy it the most, it is necessary to allot time to themselves. According to niche, the more you focus on yourself, the more fruitful benefits you will gain.
In conclusion, It is highly recommended to work five days a week with shorter hours as it will benefit individuals by providing their social needs and the freedom to do their interest in remained hours of the day. It is suggested that the government establish serious laws in this regard to forbid long-hours works to maintain the health and wellbeing of the society in a normal state.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95804195804 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64514026561 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550116550117 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1954317204 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.35 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.45 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316842639242 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846749011136 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0963123952279 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199810971456 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0906817557118 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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