It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours Do you agree or disagree with the following statement | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Undoubtedly having a job and working for many hours play a crucial role in individuals’ lives. Due to its paramount importance, efficiency of employees under different circumstances has been usually discussed and it is believed by some people that working for long hours only three days a week is much more enjoyable than working on weekdays regularly. In my opinion, working fewer days during the week is much more beneficial for employees.

First of all, working just three days a week helps people to have much more free time which can be spent on their personal lives and favourites. For example, nowadays most parents have to work every day and they cannot spend enough time with their children. Therefore, most parents can barely establish a close connection with their children and have a loving relationship. As result, it can have negative effects on children’s future lives. In addition, having more days off, cause people to plan for activities which need more time like taking longer trips. For instance, when I had a part-time job and I did not have to work every day, I used to travel around my country and see new places every week.

Secondly, some studies have shown that the majority of people are more efficient under pressure and long working hours. In other words, working for long hours during the day help people keep doing their jobs with less distraction and more concentration. For example, my sister teaches mathematics at school in five grades in just three days a week and she is so productive and fresh in comparison with last year when she had to teach for just two hours every day at school. Now she has more time to take rest and recharge her batteries which causes her to be energetic and relaxed while she is at her workplace.

In conclusion, having a job for three days in a week with longer working hours is preferable compared to a costumery job on weekdays. Not only does it provide more free time for parents to spend with their children, but also it helps people to be productive under pressure and long hours of working.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... lives. Due to its paramount importance, efficiency of employees under different ...
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Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has usually been
...employees under different circumstances has been usually discussed and it is believed by some pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78551532033 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56499531546 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50139275766 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7729266421 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.533333333 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9333333333 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 5.45110844103 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438479513692 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178660906597 0.076458572812 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991386508241 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.323928000426 0.150856017488 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568626826579 0.0645574589148 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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