It is more important for the government to spend more money on art and music museums than on facilities (like playgrounds, public swimming pool)
Infrastructure, the foundation of a quality life, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over which kind of building should be established. Art and music museums, in some people’s views, are supposed to be erected. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that facilities, such as playgrounds and swimming pools, should be constructed in that these facilities can place young students and adults as beneficiaries.
What must be prioritized is that facilities, instead of museums, is beneficial to young students, by improving their learning efficiency and physical health. To begin with, it is gymnasiums that provide students with a place to get relaxed in a hectic life. In detail, in the stadium, students can do some physical activities, such as playing tennis and running, stretching out their arms and legs to relax, so that they can study more efficiently; in contrast, under no circumstances can students get relaxed by watching a display in the museum. Moreover, never can we ignore the significance of gymnasiums to students’ physical health. To explain it further, working out in the stadium, students can say goodbye to a sedentary lifestyle and improve strengthen and flexibility; on the other hand, will students keep a good body if there are no such facilities as playgrounds and swimming pools?
What should be equally worth discussing is that facilities, rather than museums, can bring about positive impact on adults, by helping people hone their interpersonal skills and deal with pressure. Initially, it is universally acknowledged that during the process of doing physical exercise, adults can practice their communication skills. Specifically, it is obvious that in the team sports, such as basketball, people will come across people from diverse backgrounds, with whom they can practice their tactics of socializing; on the contrary, under no circumstances will such a variety of interaction and cooperation exists in the museum. Additionally, when doing a workout in the gym, people can combat with pressure. To be more specific, doing exercise can distract people from daily worries; however, the depressing environment in the museum will make adults more anxious.
Students, the foundation of social future development, can profit if governments erect facilities. Adults, the essential contributors to society, can be benefited if facilities are constructed. To conclude, only by working out in the gym, instead of attending an exhibition in the museum, can people reap numerous benefits.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, then, in contrast, kind of, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2178.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51392405063 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18713967648 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529113924051 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 4.94265232975 344% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.9407488243 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.125 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6875 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0982170266867 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0341651123772 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377255672269 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0614057865413 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00329115285972 0.0645574589148 5% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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