It is more important to work at a job that you enjoy than it is to earn a lot of money
Do you agree or disagree with the above statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your opinion.
In my opinion, a person should choose what he likes rather than choosing something on the basis of how much money can be earned. Money cannot buy passion and inner happiness from the satisfaction which can be earned through the work which we like most.
First of all, a person choosing a work or job which he loves to do, always help him to achieve success. As success is not a measure of how much money a person earns, but rather it is how much happily and satisfactorily he is successful in his life. We can also understand this by taking the example of Steve Job, founder of Apple Inc., he chose to do what he always loved and passionate about; rather doing something which can hamper his overall performance. People can flourish in their careers, if they choose the right path on the basis of their own interests, irrespective of what other professions can offer them in monetary terms.
Moreover, if a person chooses to do the job according to his core interest can help him to achieve the monetary success as well. According to my experience, there was person in my software development team, he was intelligent and hard-working person but he tried to put his best efforts to improve his performance in the software development. Being his lead, my Senior HR manager asked me to have a meeting with him. During the meeting, I tried to find out the problem areas of low performance; that 1 hour discussion with my team member helped me to understand that the person chose software development because he feels that this profession can offer him a good amount of money, but personally the person feels good himself in website designing. I tried to help him to understand the other side of choosing a position where he feels his competencies lies, and majorly, to understand that money would not come if he is performing poorly on his current position. Our management took a decision to give him a chance to work as a website designer, and here we saw a change; his overall performance started improving once he started working as a designer. Currently, the same person is working with a renowned Technology company as a website front end developer and earning very good package. Consequently, money comes after knowledge and good performance, not ever after being on a high position.
Furthermore, it is always better to improve the productivity of any individual, if they are happy at their, and there are reasons, they become an asset to the organization and can earn good income as well as they feel good personally. “Sound mind, sound body” help them to manage their families in a better way rather than stay stuck in the work and running behind money in the false hope of success. Additionally, a productive person can serve society better, because we all contribute to our society not only with money but also with our good deeds.
To encapsulate, the above mentioned points and examples substantiate my stand and I agree that a person should choose a job that he enjoys doing and feels passionate about, without running after money only. A person will definitely get successful in terms of profession as well as income when he chooses right career and works with full dedication.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 17, column 305, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to right'
Suggestion: to right
...ssion as well as income when he chooses right career and works with full dedication. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2669.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 554.0 407.700716846 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81768953069 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75878184047 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480144404332 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 831.6 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.8788016347 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.473684211 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1578947368 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0865539784472 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346609023988 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0278420651992 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.062748803085 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264986618942 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.27 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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