It is more important to work at a job that you enjoy that it is to earn a lot of money.
Do you agree or disagree with the above statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your opinion.
In my opinion, a person should choose what he likes rather than choosing something on the basis of how much money can be earned. Money can't buy passion and inner happiness from the satisfaction which can be earned through the work which we like most.
First of all, a person choosing a work or job which he loves to do, always help him to achieve success. As success is not a measure of how much money a person earns, but rather it is how much happily and satisfactorily he is successful in his life. We can also understand this by taking the example of Steve Job, founder of Apple Inc., he chose to do what he loved always and passionate about; rather doing something which can hamper his overall performance. People can flourish in their careers, if they choose the right path on the basis of their own interests, irrespective of what other professions can offer them in monetary terms.
Moreover, if a person chooses to do the job according to his core interest can help him to achieve the monetary success as well. According to my own experience, there was person in my software development team, he was intelligent and hard working person but he tried to put his best efforts to improve his performance in the software development. Being his lead, my Senior HR manager asked me to have meeting with him. During the meeting, I tried to find out the problem areas of low performance; that 1 hour discussion with my team member helped me to understand that the person chose software development becuase he feels that this profession can offer him good amount of money, but personally the person feels good himself in website designing. I tried to give him all positive sides of choosing where he feels his competencies lies and majorily money would not come if you are performing bad in your job. Our management took a decision to give him a chance to work in website designing and when he started as designer, his overall performnace started imrpoving. Currently that person is working with a renowned Tech firm as website front end developer and earning very good package. Consequently, money comes after knowledge and good performance.
Furthermore, it is always better to improve the productivity of any individual, if they are happy at their, and there are reason they can be good asset to the organization and can earn good income as well as they feel good personally. “Sound mind, sound body” help them to manage their families in a better way rather than stay stucked in the work as running behind money in the false hope of success. Additionally, a personally productive person can serve the society better, because we all contribute to our society not only with money but also with good deeds.
To encaptulate, the above mentioned points and examples substantiate my stand and I agree that a person should choose a job what he enjoys and passionate about, without running after money only. A person will definitely get successful in terms of profession as well as income when he chooses right and does that with full dedication.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 136, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... of how much money can be earned. Money cant buy passion and inner happiness from th...
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Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'loved'.
Suggestion: always loved
...r of Apple Inc., he chose to do what he loved always and passionate about; rather doing some...
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Line 17, column 293, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to right'
Suggestion: to right
...ssion as well as income when he chooses right and does that with full dedication. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2546.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 528.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82196969697 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71753245406 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488636363636 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 790.2 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.6253306523 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.0 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7894736842 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143970258488 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524980116441 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350336836657 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.087488522809 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0155409770054 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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