People's behavior is largely determined by forces not by their own making
People's behavior is a process of actions and reactions in the communication to internal and external forces. The way a person responds in any situation is determined by different factors like External factors (social, political, education, family and science) and internal factors (psychological and personal). Many researches have been conducted in the field of psychological to study the human behavior and the debate is still continued to resolve the behavioral responses. However, Human being is owner of their own choices which curve their behavior but the external forces highly impact their behavioral responsiveness in any situation.
The behavior can be categorized into two different ways in terms of forces impact on it. When behavior is highly influenced by the external forces that is called Deterministic Behavior and when it is a response of person's own choices then is it considered as Free Will. As the human being grow in their surroundings, they incorporate new things which build their belief system and everyday experiences helps them to understand the world and act in certain way according to the situation. Though people's own desires and knowledge aspire them to make decisions on the basis of their free will but external forces can maneuver it. For instance Bandura, 1961 showed in their study that children become aggressive through observation and imitation of their violent parent. So, the children's behavior changed according to their surrounding environment and that experience become their responsive behavior.
Many psychologist believe that deterministic behavior can be widely seen as for example- when a child born, it is innate and learn from the parents, family and world. Even the education system drives highly the human's behavior in different aspect of life. It may build one's capacity to lead a good life but in reality those experiences and their behavioral responses also come from the outer world. For instance- human's taste and preferences can be highly impacted by their favorite role model in term of lifestyle, career, food etc. People from different demographic locations response in a same situation in different way as person's behavioral response to high crime areas or low crime areas. As, children from high crime area are more tend to be either criminal or their fear towards the crime.
The fact is that the own built behavior is also a response of what person learn throughout their lifetime. The free will helps people to make their own desirable decisions but the external forces help to shape that behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, then, as for, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2164.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 411.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26520681265 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79164610699 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489051094891 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5196433221 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 120.222222222 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38888888889 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350614616103 0.243740707755 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126513853603 0.0831039109588 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900109998401 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260814926762 0.150359130593 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0927443269907 0.0667264976115 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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