The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Technology such as modern computers, printers, fax machines have helped the contemporary office to work with ease and efficiency. Nevertheless, working time has not decreased significantly. Also, the development of new devices should focus on helping the humanity as a whole not facilitate our leisure time.
Admittedly, with high tech offices we have been able to work with pace. Instead of repeating menial tasks, we use the computer and printers and make them do the work for us. Also, instant messaging and internet based meetings enable us to communicate with our colleagues in a unprecedented method. All these developments have helped us to retrench our time mete to complete our tasks. For instance, software developers have vocations that support working home conditions as long as they are competent enough to sustain their work. By working at home they might spend more time with their families and focusing more on their hobbies, which is also presents a positive effect to their focus on their jobs. Hence, with technology development, some of us are able emancipated from work.
Nevertheless, not all people are freed from work. Even if their efficiency has increased the total time spent in their companies may remain the same or prolonged due to company policy. Furthermore, some managers expect more work done by employees because by believe that by utilizing modern devices, they have more time to do additional ones. Not to mention the possibility of exacerbated competition between corporations. Business rivals may be stimulate their employees to work harder because of the increased efficiency in their correspondent's.
Moreover, the development of technology should focus on the improved conditions of the humanities rather that myopic goals of increased leisure time. For instance, scientists and engineers should not only research on producing amenities, but also environmental issues such as how to foil global warming by reducing carbon dioxide emission. Companies such as Edison motors are a good example. Instead of developing traditional cars, they manufacture electric vehicles which is friendlier to the environment while still focusing on the function of the car itself: fast transportation.
In conclusion, even though a fraction of us may benefit from development, others may have to suffer like the precedents. In addition, development should be grounded on the good of the human in the long run, not just short sighted goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 275, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42377260982 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9963376836 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4624382646 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9523809524 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2380952381 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181021545424 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535153449752 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038423860718 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100565686511 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260484953985 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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