The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Any new and better way of doing the things is known as the technology.The above prompt suggests that the basic goal of technology advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.I strongly agree with the above statement about the technological advancement because of this three reasons.
Firstly, when all the important work of the people are taken care by the technology then people will get more chance to explore themselves. For example,due to more work load people nowadays have forgotten themselves as an individual who is going to die one day.So, if people are given more leisure time due to the technological advancement then they will get the chance to explore spirituality. Spirituality means knowing yourself,if all the people are focused on spirituality then every individual can remain in peace throughout their life.
Secondly, if people are given more leisure time than they will get the chance to explore the nature.For example due to many responsibilities of the individuals in the early age they are working very hard in order to fill the mouths of their family member. if the technological advancement is able to take the care such situation then people will get more leisure time due to which they might get connected to the nature which might have positive impact on them.
Lastly, Technology should be like boon for the people so that they can enjoy more freedom.For instance if people are given more freedom then they might work will full interest and enthusiasm.They also might get more time to spend with their family member which might create harmony within the members of the group. The technological development if giving more leisure time means more effectiveness.
Of course some argue that people should be given less leisure time in order for their progress however,working more time does not mean the development but working with technology can yield better result,Therefore technological development should encourage the people for more leisure time by providing effective results.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 331.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27190332326 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93063817594 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471299093656 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 23.0359550562 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.835818386 60.3974514979 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 193.888888889 118.986275619 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.7777777778 23.4991977007 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.3333333333 5.21951772744 275% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338025477638 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166816034221 0.0831039109588 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810697603668 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223429372249 0.150359130593 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567131009578 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.8 14.1392134831 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.48 48.8420337079 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 12.1743820225 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 100.480337079 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.2143820225 146% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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