The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The prompt states that the cardinal goal of technological advancement should be to increment people’s efficiency, so in turn they can have more leisure time. I agree with the prompt as this will allow individuals to find more joy in their life by having free time to enjoy their friends and family. Also, this will present an opportunity for those overachievers to continue their growth either by participating in a new hobby or pursuing more education. Both of them allow society to improve.
Many people complain of the absence of free time due to their daily errands and activities. If technology gets to a point where many of those are simplified or can be left for a machine to take care of, then in theory individuals will have more free time to spend as they wish. This will allow society to enjoy their time with friends and family, bringing positivity and blissfulness into their life. One example of this phenomenon is the holidays. Everyone loves the holidays and looks forward to them. One reason is because they get to spend those days with their loved ones. Not only does it serve as a small break from the daily mundane life, but it serves as therapy that energizes society. Which is a great benefit.
Moreover, there is a segment of the population that are overachievers. They would appreciate this given time to educate themselves more or find a fulfilling hobby. When I was in college, I had a part time job that paid a decent wage that granted me the opportunity to study and be part of many clubs and organizations. As a result, I learned how to be a leader and the utility of multitasking and time management skills. If this example is extrapolated to the population as a whole, it would lead to an improvement in our society by providing people with more skills and experiences to allow them to become a more open minded society.
In contrast to my argument, some may propose the idea that not everyone has positive tendencies. More free time would permit those people to have negative actions that would increase vandalism or robberies. This is not incorrect as it would be a flawed assumption to think everyone shares the same concept of goodwill. Nonetheless, because society will have more free time, I would presume a portion of the population will dedicate themselves to be role models for the youth. Overtime, this would create a new generation of adults that will appreciate their surroundings more, and will be keen to give back to their community.
In conclusion, the main goal of technological advancements should be to create more leisure time for people. This will in turn bring tremendous benefits to everyone. It will bring more joy to society by granting time to be spent with family and friends, similar to the holidays. Furthermore, people will have more time to be more productive and may seek to educate themselves or learn new hobbies. Overall, more free time presents people with unlimited opportunities, and most people would seek to make the best of it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 697, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rves as therapy that energizes society. Which is a great benefit. Moreover, there...
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Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...g hobby. When I was in college, I had a part time job that paid a decent wage that grante...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, then, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2499.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 518.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82432432432 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.787485022 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469111969112 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 810.0 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.7848384593 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5555555556 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1851851852 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7037037037 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 10.2758426966 224% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23596937807 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071753382134 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720351039996 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153179337075 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516818586561 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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