The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.
"Butter has now been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. Only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers cannot distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine. Thus, we predict that Happy Pancake House will be able to increase profits dramatically if we extend this cost-saving change to all our restaurants in the southeast and northeast as well."
In the above argument it is assumed that replacing butter with margarine will increase the profit of the happy pancake restaurant if it is extended to all its branch which is in the southeast and northeast.Further the assumption is supported by the statement that only 2 out of 100 complained through the server for the change of butter over margarine and also the customer were not able to decide the difference between butter and margarine.But the above argument is not exhaustive,in order to validate that assumption the argument must be able to answer these three questions.
What if the many people who were having the complain over the replacement of butter with margarine did not complain through the server.They were not happy with the replacement.It has not been mentioned in the argument that all people who bought the butter and given margarine responded through the server but it has only mentioned 2% only were not satisfied but of how many people.
What if replacing butter with margarine in other branch of the happy pancake restaurant is not accepted by the regular customers.How it would be possible to generate the great profit if the regular customer are not willing to accept it,There is no mention in the argument that how customer of the other branch will respond because every areas have liking for certain type of flavor,
What if in spite of asking for butter the customer are given margarine and they find it cheating.There is mention in the argument that customer who asked for butter were given margarine and they did not react anything which means they might be unknown but not every customer is that kind,some may find it cheating.
So,the above argument is not that strong.In order to develop strong argument the business manager of the happy pancake house restaurant must do the exhaustive research and must be able to answer the above kind of questions with full clarity.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 332 350
No. of Characters: 1563 1500
No. of Different Words: 130 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.269 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.708 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.388 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 55.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.041 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.531 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.895 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Further
...which is in the southeast and northeast.Further the assumption is supported by the stat...
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Line 1, column 443, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...difference between butter and margarine.But the above argument is not exhaustive,in...
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Line 1, column 483, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
...But the above argument is not exhaustive,in order to validate that assumption the a...
^^^
Line 5, column 41, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...What if the many people who were having the complain over the replacement of butter with mar...
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Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...ine did not complain through the server.They were not happy with the replacement.It ...
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Line 5, column 177, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...hey were not happy with the replacement.It has not been mentioned in the argument ...
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Line 9, column 130, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: How
...s not accepted by the regular customers.How it would be possible to generate the gr...
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Line 9, column 236, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , There
...ar customer are not willing to accept it,There is no mention in the argument that how ...
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Line 13, column 98, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...ven margarine and they find it cheating.There is mention in the argument that custome...
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Line 13, column 288, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , some
...nown but not every customer is that kind,some may find it cheating. So,the above...
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Line 17, column 3, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
... kind,some may find it cheating. So,the above argument is not that strong.In or...
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Line 17, column 42, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...o,the above argument is not that strong.In order to develop strong argument the bu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, kind of, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9968847352 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69478148017 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 204.123752495 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.414330218069 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 19.7664670659 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 80.0 22.8473053892 350% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 177.291426753 57.8364921388 307% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 401.0 119.503703932 336% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 80.25 23.324526521 344% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.70786347227 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185555335936 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121681550728 0.0743258471296 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0172205670467 0.0701772020484 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110860141063 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310657478518 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 42.2 14.3799401198 293% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -9.72 48.3550499002 -20% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 34.5 12.197005988 283% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.9 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 98.500998004 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 12.3882235529 218% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 34.0 11.1389221557 305% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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