It is not uncommon to ask money from friend in time of need. However, it is well know that many relationships are damaged when money matters are involved in it. The same holds true even for friendships. In my opinion, borrowing money from friends in not a good thing. One should approach there family members for monetary help in times of financial crisis. Borrowing money from friends should be kept as a last resort. My opinion is based on many incidences that occurred
in my life.
One of my fathers childhood had asked a huge some of money from my father stating that his mother needed some emergency treatment. Later, when my father asked him to return the money, he refused to do so and in turn blamed my father to be money minded and selfish. My father was take aback by his reaction. That day he didn't just lost his old friend which he had trusted and loved so dearly, but he also lost faith in friendship.
Another incidence happened with one of my colleagues at work. He had the bad habit of borrowing money from his friends every now and then. Gradually, all his friends drifted apart from him because of his bad habit.
All these incidences have made my belief strong that, we should refrain from borrowing money from friends if we want to nurture a healthy and long lasting friendships in life. In times of financial need, we should first approach our family members for help and support.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, well, apart from, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1167.0 1977.66487455 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 252.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63095238095 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36905426603 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563492063492 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 351.0 618.680645161 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9256502203 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9375 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.75 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155199269859 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635024080954 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626275424195 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106600205107 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346774435786 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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