A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time
The amount of salary is always controverted by people. Even though some people think having more vacation at the expense of less salary is worth; but, I, personally, subscribe to this idea that most people have enough time for going vacation and also the high salary is more important than anything else. These days, individuals need money to do each activity like attending to vacation. They will got stress and have uncomfortable time during vacation and their sparse time unless they obtain adequate salary.
In first place, in the modern day, doing all activities like going vacations rely on money. Everything have cost even getting along with friends during leisure time because the people have the habit of going theater, game center, coffee and so on, all of them aren’t free of charge at all. If people go toward low salary to have more vacation, after a while not only they will not be able to go vacation but also they cannot attend to common pastime with a little required money. All aspects of their life interweave with money, they pay their house rent, cost of their children schools, the cost of possible disease, to name but a few. For instance, my friend accepted his manager suggestion to get more vacation time but by a less salary. He was looking for more rest and time off to spend more time with his friends and family. But it didn’t take a lot of time he noticed that this less salary cannot be responded to all necessary demands of his life. He wish he could come back to those days with high salary even with less vacation.
Secondly, psychologically speaking, having more money, especially in modern tough life which everything value with money, give people more self-confidence and peace in their lives. The rest of people, those ones without enough salary, are more stressful and carry an overwhelming life. It stands to reason that this group of people not only cannot handle their needs which make some emotional lacks in their lives but also the poor financial quality that govern their family lives, make their family-cohesion fragile and delicate in which the people live more worried. All the members of such a family are always debating over the topic of money and their demands. Even though some people may like to have more vacation, but most of them have enough rest time to attend ever what activity they want and even go vacation. The problems made by less salary is inasmuch as noticeable that it don’t worth to get more vacation by earning less money.
In summary, by taking all of these into account, in my opinion, it is not worthy at all to have more vacation at the expense of less salary. Money have an important role in most aspects of life which are highlighted more and more in modern life. In fact, by less salary, people will not be able to afford vacation and even the expense of their routines, so it is not a good option to have more vacation at the cost of less salary.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'get'
Suggestion: get
...y like attending to vacation. They will got stress and have uncomfortable time duri...
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Line 4, column 968, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wishes'.
Suggestion: wishes
...o all necessary demands of his life. He wish he could come back to those days with h...
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Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: THESE_ONES[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'those' instead.
Suggestion: those
...ace in their lives. The rest of people, those ones without enough salary, are more stressf...
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Line 6, column 147, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...on at the expense of less salary. Money have an important role in most aspects of li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in fact, in summary, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2434.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7079303675 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36250910955 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444874274662 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 791.1 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9180498532 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.904761905 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.619047619 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315464043554 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112204164591 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823835770141 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226332823452 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0871857420715 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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