When you decides which of the two places to visit, you will have two of the following choices :
1. Discuss with someone who has visited the two places.
2. Read online.
Which one do you think is better ?
Use details and examples to support your answer.
In this modern life, people when want to travel somewhere or visit a place, have a lot of chances to recognize characteristics of their goal place, obtain enough information and so forth. In this regard, they can either talk with a person who has visited the place to achieve their required knowledge or do some research online and read throughout the internet. Whenever I am in a dilemma to opt for a place between two available choices, I will read about both of places via the internet instead of discussing with individuals that have had experiences of visiting this place. I think not only is it a more reliable source of information, but also it provides me with a variety of information to opt for a visiting place properly.
To begin with, it is not to mention that if we are going to obtain a decent understanding of the pros and cons of a situation, decision and so forth, we will consider the reality of information come to us. From my point of view, one way to have precise knowledge about the places we want to visit is that we must collect a variety of knowledge and information. If we talk with a person to find such an understanding to make a sound decision between two places to visit, we would consider only one perspective. We cannot realize him if he passed us wrong information, especially the opinion of people about a place is extremely depended on their previous expectation of a good place to visit, their mental condition in the time of traveling and visiting such a place and so more. In contrast, we can read diverse magazines' articles, memories, to name but a few all of which help us to compare information and draw a correct conclusion.
Secondly, as far as figuring whether or not a place is a good one to visit is concerned, we must examine different aspects as its historical aspect, its financial aspects. The various information cannot be achieved by discussing with others since individuals cannot hold such a great amount of information in their mind, even they can do so, they don't have enough time to advocate us in order to give us all necessary information. On the other hand, the internet is a permanent source of information which we can use everywhere and every time we want. In this line of thought, we can just prepare a question list about both places among which we want to choose to visit, and after that, we can use our free time to respond to these question via the internet. Thanks to the internet and reading online, we will not make a choice with deficient information.
In summary, with all this taken into account, I do believe that reading online is definitely a better way to make a choice between two places to visit than discussing with an individual that has seen the two places. It is a dependable source with a great variety of information we need to know.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 30, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...usion. Secondly, as far as figuring whether or not a place is a good one to visit is conce...
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Line 4, column 348, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...n their mind, even they can do so, they dont have enough time to advocate us in orde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, i think, in contrast, in summary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2325.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60396039604 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77221074885 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455445544554 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 758.7 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.9238095099 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.3125 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5625 20.6045352989 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246578369111 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0979633806131 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643271512215 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18449242012 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522783409606 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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