Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most business people are motivated only by the desire for more money.
Motivation is the most important factor to live. All people in order do their task, from their routine to their more important task like their job, need some motivation and encouragement. Even though one of the ordinary approaches to encourage business people, is paying more money, I, personally, subscribe to an Iranian proverb that says, "it isn’t possible to buy valuable things with money". I am of the opinion that financial incentives have ephemeral effects. people can be success in their business, and beneficial for their administrators and even for their society only if they pursue their interest
In first place, psychologically speaking, everyone can be prosperous only when he or she is satisfied with his or her life. The people must try hard to reach their goals and interest which is the first step of thriving of people. Different people have different interest and goals like becoming famous, being helpful for human beings, creating something new and so on. Chasing these by people depending on their personality and desires, prepare opportunity to be motivated during their lives and jobs. It is possible stimulate most people to do their job well and be motivation person with money, but only for a short time. After a while, people who aren’t in their right place, I mean in the place related to their interest, will be frustrated and no longer do their best. For example, I used to work as an employee in a Medical Equipment Manufacturer in which I had to do something routine without any recreation and researching. Even though I earned a lot of money, after a while I couldn’t do my job with interest opposite the starting months of working because I was a person who likes being up-to-date and do research for something new.
Secondly, statistically speaking, most of the people who are in a good financial condition aren’t any more want in their lives. Oppositely, the middle class of a society are more interested and motivated to be success. In fact, one the most conspicuous characteristic of human beings is being live and active because of the desire of compensation lacking in their lives. The people who can earn a great deal of money, a short time later of being prosperous and wealthy, they go toward this thinking: they can buy and own everything which they want. This point of view makes them upset and aimless. It is hard for them to find a valuable goal in their lives because most of them evaluate and measure everything with money.
In summary, by considering all of these into account, I think that money isn’t a reliable and permanent motivation in anyone's life. The people need to be in the way of their interest in order to be the energized and simulated person. It is not to mention that money, after a while, makes people upset and aimless because it changes their way of viewing to life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 482, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, i mean, i think, in fact, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2390.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88752556237 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7872347914 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480572597137 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 754.2 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6723065955 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.80952381 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242668738068 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855557465214 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653636810725 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162875183137 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410187237129 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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