Living independently or living with parents
Some people think that it is better for young adults if they stay with their parents for a longer time. They cite this reason thinking that young adults are not fully matured enough to live independently, on their own. They think that these adults might learn more at their home from their parents than on their own. However, in my opinion it would be better if the young adults live on their own and independent from their parents. I believe this because of the following two reasons.
First of all, the things that young aged people learn on their own and away from their parents are huge. For example, currently I am 22 years old and I have been living on my own since my high school and there is my friend of same age who lives with his parents. I have seen that ,as compared to him, I have more socializing skills with new people .This could be because of the reason that I have been socializing and talking with so many new people after the time I left my home . This could not have been possible if I was staying with my parents because most of the time I would watch television and do my homework only as all other works were done by the parents, I did not have to be bothered to do them.
Second, living independently helps to improve your decision making capabilities. For example, if I am living independently then I have to make all the decisions on my own , whether it be the coaching classes I join or the clothes I buy. If I was living with my parents then all these sort of decisions would have been made after the discussion with them thus decreasing my decision making capacity which is very much required in a young adult. It is necessary for young adults to make their decision on their own because in life there comes so many difficult situations where they have to deal without the help or support of others.
In conclusion, deciding whether to live independently or live with parents is a complex topic. This is primarily because there are certain benefits of both the choices. However, I strongly believe that the young adults should live independently because it will help them learn so many things and also it will improve their decision making capabilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 280, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...lives with his parents. I have seen that ,as compared to him, I have more socializ...
^^
Line 5, column 348, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... more socializing skills with new people .This could be because of the reason that...
^^
Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...ore socializing skills with new people .This could be because of the reason that I h...
^^^^
Line 5, column 414, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the reason that I have been socializing and talking with so many new people afte...
^^
Line 5, column 481, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...new people after the time I left my home . This could not have been possible if I ...
^^
Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...have to make all the decisions on my own , whether it be the coaching classes I jo...
^^
Line 7, column 279, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this sort' or 'these nulls'?
Suggestion: this sort; these nulls
...f I was living with my parents then all these sort of decisions would have been made after...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, then, thus, for example, in conclusion, sort of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54292929293 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44094927804 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441919191919 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7726333161 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.4375 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319008149047 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141883005201 0.076458572812 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152110070651 0.0737576698707 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250340903946 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0927004587709 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.7 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.