Many companies sell products or service but at the same time cause environmental damage. Some say it can be stopped by asking them to pay penalty, such as a higher tax when they cause the environmental damage. Others say there are better ways to stop them from harming environment . What do you think is the best way to prevent the environment from deteriorating ?
Can you picture there were flocks of birds flying high up in the sky, or perched on tree branches, chirping and hopping around? Suddenly one day, they all disappeared, nowhere to be seen. This is exactly what is depicted in Rachel Carson’s “Silent Spring,” where she vividly points out the drawbacks of extensive use of DDT and passionately advocates the importance of environmental protection. In my opinion, a destroyed environment is just like a noxious tumor, afflicting pain and devastation permanently. In fact, when companies sell products or service while causing environmental damage, I believe that mandating them to pay higher taxes will most effectively deter them from continuously polluting the environment.
To begin with, no companies like paying high taxes, since the higher the taxes they have to pay, the lower their revenues will become. Provided that companies are required to pay high taxes, companies will attempt to seek for more environmentally friendly materials or ingredients manufacture their products, thus mitigating the damage caused to the environment. To exemplify, a very famous Taiwanese company that produced plastic plates releases toxins such as copper or cadmium into the nearby rivers where the company was located. The resulting consequence is that people living downstream become critically ill because of the contaminated water they have been drinking. People living in the villages downstream also needed to pay to have the water cleaned. However, the expenses of going to the doctor or paying to clean the water were not reflected on the plastic plates that this company produced and the residents of the villages instigated a protest. Such negative externality eventually prompted the local government to impose a high tax, specially thirty-four percent of the total revenues from the plastic plates sold, on the company. This plastic-plate company eventually could not bear the high cost from the tax and replaced the artificial ingredients with those that were less harmful and could be recycled by the environment, such as paper, for the production of their plates.
Furthermore, regulating the environmental damage via high taxes can be more effective since it suggests that the regulation directly comes from the government and everyone has to comply with it. If any company refuses to pay taxes, it might face the fate of being shut down. The direct control and supervision from the government would be the most effective method of containing the environmental harm among the other methods that might not be rigidly implemented. For instance, an oil refinery factory in Beijing, China emitted an excessive amount of carbon dioxide and sulfur dioxide into the air, causing the air quality to be compromised. Despite the severe pollution and damage to the air quality, the local government did not regulate the factory’s harmful gaseous emissions since the country weighed more emphasis on the economic development. Therefore, some non-profit organizations organized by the local citizens waged a protest, asking the factory to close or even occupying the front door of the factory, not allowing the employees to get in or get out. The owner of the factory eventually conceded, agreeing to reduce the harmful emissions. However, this did not last long. Not until the protest was over for about a month did the oil refinery factory began to gush out lots of carbon dioxide, soot, and other noisome particulate matter. The damage ended up not being controlled effectively. Therefore, only via the government’s power can environmental damage caused by companies be effectively and permanently controlled.
Although higher taxes might exert much more strain on companies’ budgets or revenues or incomes, however, as the condition of Earth deteriorates and more and more people advocate for sustainable development, some government penalty in the form of higher taxes is considered not only important but also imperative. After all, we would not want our offspring to witness barren and arid landscapes, where greenery is an luxury that they cannot afford.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , &apos
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... and arid landscapes, where greenery is an luxury that they cannot afford.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, after all, as to, for instance, in fact, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3495.0 1977.66487455 177% => OK
No of words: 647.0 407.700716846 159% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40185471406 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.04343084457 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99121323253 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 345.0 212.727598566 162% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533230293663 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 1108.8 618.680645161 179% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.3137602078 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.423076923 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8846153846 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 3.85842293907 415% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250023429397 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062482790453 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776062143883 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146741847241 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596068856011 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 191.0 86.8835125448 220% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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