Happiness is being directly linked to economic success recently. However, I do not support such idea. Aiming to win a large amount of money people start to overwork and it rises the level of stress and lows the quality of living, leading to a non-stop working process which can turn to an illness.
What do we need to be happy? Many people can answer this question by saying money. Although, money is not synonymous of happiness and it can even be the oppose of it. Satisfying the material needs give a random feeling of pleasure. However, it is just temporary, as soon as one dream of having such material product is achieved, another one comes over right way and the entire satisfaction will never be accomplished. I believe that money is important for living. Who not does want to live in a comfortable home, within a full fridge and some budget to travel? But other things over money are also necessary in life, such as spending time with the loved ones, doing your hobbies, sports, relaxing activities.
The prevalence of burnout is increasing all over the world. This disease occurs when someone works to much that finishing by having psychologic problems such as depression, which makes the person to lose pleasure in life and reduces the wish to perform any activity, even the work. Besides the effect in the health, having a high cost of living requires a large amount of money, so there is the need to work hard to maintain such lifestyle, otherwise it will not be possible afford to have all what is believed be necessary for happiness. Consequently, a circle is formed: the more you gain the more you will think you need to gain, then your lifestyle can be kept. In other words, you will be your own slave.
Overall, money is required for living comfortably. However, it is not synonymous of happiness. Material good does not replace interaction with the loved ones, emotional experiences, preforming the favorites activities, travelling. Those, in my opinion, are the features for a happy life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...onymous of happiness and it can even be the oppose of it. Satisfying the material needs gi...
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Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
... This disease occurs when someone works to much that finishing by having psycholog...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, however, if, so, then, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83526011561 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6405194334 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580924855491 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 66.840014213 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.65 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137899688136 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445529554614 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625599890467 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0799566836058 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475140522009 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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