Many people believe that strong tradition helps to civilise a nation
and that governments should therefore subsidise musicians, theatre
companies, actors and artists.
Explain whether you agree or disagree with this statement and what
you think governments should do to promote the traditional cultural
heritage of a country.
Many countries’ cultures are preserved by the strong tradition inherent in the music, art
and theatre of that country. It has been argued that the government should pay to
promote the uniqueness of a country’s culture by subsidising the artists, musicians and
actors which keep culture alive. I agree that a government should fund its citizens’
cultural pursuits, since part of a government’s responsibility includes the preservation of
its people’s own unique cultural traditions.
If a government wants to preserve and maintain the art and music which is historically
traditional to its country, then it must take steps to insure that those traditions are valued
and fostered. Firstly, a government can help maintain the cultural traditions of a country
by using tax money to build theatres, music and concert halls, galleries and museums. By
providing venues for artists, musicians and actors to practice, perform and exhibit their
arts, the government is helping people come together to participate in traditional creative
activities.
Furthermore, governments could provide grants, scholarships and education to artists
and musicians who are prepared to make special contributions to the preservation of a
country’s traditional music and art. By giving students of art and music incentives to
maintain cultural traditions, governments can promote the longevity of its people’s
traditions. For example, if a student who was interested in fine arts was offered a full
scholarship to explore and paint in tradition styles, that student would be more inclined
to follow that option than if no scholarship was offered.
In conclusion, I believe that governments should provide venues and offer grants and
subsidies to artists and musicians of traditional music and art, to maintain the strong
tradition of the country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 56, Rule ID: INSURE_THAT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ensure' (=make sure)? 'Insure' means 'pay money to insurance company'.
Suggestion: ensure
...its country, then it must take steps to insure that those traditions are valued and f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 281.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66903914591 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18928723153 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523131672598 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.9514607323 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.3 100.406767564 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.53405017921 485% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233517826517 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113002369682 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523564144854 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0775117185435 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053053938434 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 11.7677419355 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 10.9000537634 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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