Education plays a vital thing during students’ learning periods. Some people think it is a good way for teachers to teaching students the right-and-wrong judgments and good manners, while others argue that teachers should only focus on teaching academic-related knowledge. As for me, I believe it is necessary for teachers to shape not only academic study but also other aspects of students’ development.
First of all, since teachers are care about students’ future, it can make students have a better future by teaching academic things as well as socialization knowledge. Take me for example; when I studied in junior high school, my math teacher, Julia, taught me how to distinguish the right things and the wrong things. With integrity continuous possession, I always chose to do the right things in my job works, making my supervisor so impressed that he offered me an unprecedented promotion. Furthermore, I was entitled to the most integrity and compliance workers in my company. Therefore, learning the right-and-wrong judgment really from Julia really shaped me into an integrity person with decent future development.
Secondly, students are easy to obey teachers, so it is an opportunity for teachers to shape the students’ different aspects of behavior such as right-and-wrong distinction and manner development. For example, my high school teacher, Mike, was a strict mentor. He always forced us to obey not only studying hard but also being polite to people and other socialization manners. If one did not perform well, he would strictly punish him or her, making all my classmates and I did our best to learn and showed good manners. At the end of the semester, we all learned how to performed to be a good manner person. Additionally, my class even won the best polite class of the school. Thus, obeying Mike’s strict rules really shaped me and my classmates into polite and well-mannered students.
Thirdly, if teachers teach only academic subjects, students may think the grades and academic performance is the only goal in their life, thereby misleading them to abandon their social skill development. For instance, when my brother, Timmy, studied in high school, his teacher wash brained him that the grades were the only things worth pursuing in his life. By learning this thought, Timmy stopped joining social activities, teaming up with friends on presentations, and even communicating with people. Instead, he enclosed himself in his bedroom to study to make sure he performed well on each of the school exams. However, even though he graduated from the National Taiwan University, he had a hard time finding a suitable job due to his poor social abilities. Neither could he build a social connection with others nor could he collaborate with his colleagues. Hence, Timmy’s teacher really misled him into the wrong concept of success.
In conclusion, I hold the profound conviction that teachers should teach students distinctive aspects of their behaviors. After all, not only can this approach allow students to have a better future but it can also easily shape students’ social behaviors.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, after all, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2640.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2380952381 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95446834811 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511904761905 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 780.3 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7814252988 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242009304322 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709683817464 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854831278944 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161392832996 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0934028967974 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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