Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit
museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are some moot points about why many people visit museums when they travel to a new place. The question of the reasons for this action has aroused as a subject among academicians. When it comes to my position, by weighing up the pros and the cons, I strongly subscribe to the point that museums have significant aspects from various perspectives. I have some reasons the most outstanding of which will be explicated in the ensuing paragraphs.
The first reason worth discussing here is that people travel to new places for various goals. One of the most important goals is knowing the various cultures, therefore, museums are the best place for familiarizing with cultures. As a case to the point, I vividly remember two years ago I traveled to Turkey in summer vacations. I had not any knowledge about Turkish culture. Thus I decided to visit some museums in Istanbul city. One of the memorable museums was a food museum. In that place, I identified with various Turkish foods. As a consequence, I tried these foods in Turkish restaurants which were very pleased for me. My personal experience competently corroborates to the point that museums give important information to people.
By the same token another paramount reason to be mentioned here is that museums are valuable places for each country because these are a source of income for the government, therefore, authorities try to establish new museums in their sphere. As a result, we can visit these places carefully. This action helps us to take a good pattern from other countries and set up new museums in our country. My personal example demonstrates this reality, I watched a program on the BBC channel last week. In that program director asserted that Georgia which is a very small country hired much expertise from other countries to established new museums in that country. This work led to Georgia, ameliorate their grade in tourism attraction rate. Hence, many tourists went to this country for visiting these new museums. My personal example shed some light on the point that museums have a beneficial impact on country development.
To wrap it up, according to the aforementioned reasons, I reiterate that, people visit museums for different reasons. In my view, museums not only add much information to us but also, help us to take a pattern from another country and establish these kinds of museums in our country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb know is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'knows'
Suggestion: knows
... goals. One of the most important goals is knowing the various cultures, therefore, museum...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... goals. One of the most important goals is knowing the various cultures, therefore, museum...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ot any knowledge about Turkish culture. Thus I decided to visit some museums in Ista...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, therefore, thus, as a result, in my view, by the same token
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96268656716 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7679324796 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514925373134 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.7929919272 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7391304348 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4782608696 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209469824586 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662234696877 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796308856108 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143168719118 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497471637847 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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