The more money people have, the more money they should give away to charity
Currently, society has witnessed an unprecedented accumulation of material affluence, thus the gap between the haves and have-nots is increasingly widening, which triggers some complaints and resentment toward the whole society. In regard to this situation, some individuals reckon that those people with wealthy assets are supposed to donate money to charity. Personally speaking, I concur with the opinion and my view can be substantiated as follows.
To start with, the endowment enables those people in poor condition to maintain their basic lives. Concretely, due to their limit on aptitudes, they probably cannot find employment, thus without a steady income, they are lack of some basic necessities to accommodate their basic needs, which eventually gives rise to death or fatal diseases. However, with the funds distributed by charity, they can purchase some pieces of stuff to eat or wear, which enables them to get rid of the extreme poverty. Meanwhile, the donation also affords them to have checkups to prevent them from being plagued from some fatal diseases. With regard to the poor who already have some chronic diseases, the donation can prolong their lifespan, instead of letting them to be excruciated or enslaved by these illnesses. Furthermore, the endowment also enables the poor to improve their employable skills, for instance, they can be sponsored to enter vocational schools to sharpen their practical skills, like making diversified artifacts, which renders them a force that drives them out of poverty by themselves, compared to receiving the constant donation. Therefore, the donation can facilitate the lives of those people suffering poverty, not only through the direct allocation of money but also through its effects on honing their pragmatic skills to accumulate their own wealth.
What’s more, distributing money to charity also contributes to the stability of society. To be more specific, some individuals, who are suffering from extreme poverty, tend to harbor resentment toward the wealthy people, even the whole society. Driven by such terrible notions existing in their mind, they are likely to behave in some socially unacceptable ways. Some may launch attacks toward students, like a school shooting, while others probably enact kidnapping to charge for a lot of money from the wealthy. Even those poor people do not generate resentment, they sometimes are forced by the extremely poor situation to commit crimes, for instance, it is said that a bunch of robberies are committed for the sake of obtaining ten dollars to purchase a bun. The research conducted to evaluate the relationship between crime rate and wealth illuminates that the poorer a region is, the higher crime rate it has. Hence, from the above reason, the extreme poor poses a threat to the stability of society, which indicates that sufficient money ought to be donated from the wealthy to the poor so as to ensure the social security.
Admittedly, some individuals reckon that the assets the wealthy possess are their private wealth, nobody is entitled to require them to donate it and the wealthy are also not obliged to endow, nevertheless, taking the factor of social security and fundamental human rights into consideration, the deficiencies of endowment can be compensated by the perks brought by it.
In a nutshell, those people with more affluence ought to donate more money to charity so as to guarantee individuals fundamental human rights and maintain social stability.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 234, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
... a steady income, they are lack of some basic necessities to accommodate their basic needs, which...
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Line 3, column 575, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are sometimes
...people do not generate resentment, they sometimes are forced by the extremely poor situation ...
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Line 3, column 1099, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...be donated from the wealthy to the poor so as to ensure the social security. Admittedly...
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Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...e ought to donate more money to charity so as to guarantee individuals fundamental human...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, in regard to, to start with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 90.0 52.1666666667 173% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2948.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 554.0 407.700716846 136% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32129963899 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81558130368 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514440433213 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 929.7 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.8883492458 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.157894737 100.406767564 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1578947368 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15789473684 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195113137543 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681788880311 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786066890324 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129773336287 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981195890261 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 11.7677419355 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 163.0 86.8835125448 188% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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