Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
It has been decads, that the effect of television, movies, and social media has been a controvetial issuse among soieties. The film production industry is becoming bigger every year, and they are investing alot money on this field to make it even more powerfull. Plenty of people holds the conviction that movies and television have higher negative impacts related to it positive impacts on the youth's atitute; whereas others might exactly hold the opposite point of view. Ergo, when it comes to my stance, by weighing up the pros and cons, I firmly endorse the first conviction instead of the later one. I will investigate the reasons substantiating my viewpoint in the following essay.
The first point to be mentioned is that young kids are at a crucial phase in their lives which they are still looking to shape their personality. So, they are very prone to be attracted to different variety of subjects. As every thing in this world have two sides and are like two-edges sword, which one side is good and the other side is bad. The youngsters can be attracted to the bad side and gain all the negatavities from that matter of subject. Movies and tv are like this; as long as they could have vantages and good iffects on people but they also can be very harmful. For instance, most of the celebrities are not very elite people; their life styles are nt very healthy, therefore they could have a bad effect on the young generation.
Alongside the elaborated readon above, another idea that is notworthy to consider is that young people are very easy convinced people. Because they are not experinced like their parents and do not have the knowledge and informatiom about most of things, It is very easy for film production companies to target this generation and make more money by them, and because those companies do not care about community and the peoples' future, they would not put much effort to produce good and meaningfull movies. As a result most of the tv shows are with low concept such as Californication.
All in all, taking all the reasons and point mentioned about into count, my sound belief is that their negative impact is more than their good ones; because ,
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Suggestion: most of the things; most things
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, still, therefore, whereas, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76781002639 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51658762939 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53562005277 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.404322632 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.466666667 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2666666667 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191860965147 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516775411755 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517819201257 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104938897072 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347790250383 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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