Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave

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Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

There is no shortage of opinions on the influence of movies and television on young people's behavior. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely agree that movies and televisions give more negative impacts on the way young people behave. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.

First and foremost, movies and television shows would affect youngsters' studying eagerness. Students will get attracted to those TV shows and abandon their homework. They would turn into lazy couch potatoes in front of their TV and lose their enthusiasm for studying. Not to even mention that the current society's job and school enrollment requirements emphasize the great academic grades of employees and students respectively. How could they find a great job in the future without studying? My personal experience is a great example of this. When I was young, I loved watching TV shows especially those with long series such as Games of Thrones. I would just leave my homework aside to finish the whole series because I was eager to know the ending and what was coming on next in the episodes. In the end, I became lazy in studying and failed my final exam. I was not able to choose my dream school due to the unfulfilled criteria. For this reason, I agree that movies and television shows are the culprits of the loss of studying eagerness in young people.

Secondly, movies and television shows make youngsters spend more money on what they have learned in the shows. Most of the actresses in Korean drama are having great fashion sense and are often full of makeup. This bright and attractive appearance would let the youngsters imitate them. Drawing from my own experience, I would spend my pocket money on buying cosmetics and makeup equipment. As these cosmetics cost a limb, I would rather buy those cheap and low-quality products which in turn harm my skin. Although I look well in makeup, my skin became full of pores and rashes due to makeup allergies. Moreover, I would spend even more on supplements and medicines to recover my unbearable skin complexity. It is certainly clear that the movies and television shows would encourage youngsters on money expenditure.

In light of the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that movies and television shows bring more bad impacts on youngsters because of the affected academic grades and money spending.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, i feel, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96782178218 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69451016166 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519801980198 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0257457867 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2608695652 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5652173913 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30434782609 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166524709167 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530499750766 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778018499016 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132797667203 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0961920520271 0.0645574589148 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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