Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

Movies and television are two of the most influential phenomenon that can shape or alter our behaviors. Society is often divided on the subject that which one of the negative or positive sides affects more. I believe that, in total, these new technologies have more positive effects than negatives. There are two reasons why I subscribe to this idea.
First, television regardless of its harmful influences is a unique teaching device. It is amusing and can be watched for several hours in each family. Therefore, people can use it to learn lots of good habits which are shown in programs or movies. For example, there are special programs like personal interviews that talk about good behaviors leading to success or happiness. In addition, specific shows each night have professional discussions about social problems that teach the audience in an indirect way how to behave in different spaces. You can see people that are talking everywhere about last night's movie and the happening from different sides of view. In this way, they challenge each other's opinions about movie characters and what they should do in their opinion. These talks, often have some valuable conclusions about morality.
Second, Movies are very good materials to clarify the difference between good and bad behavior. To explain more, our children see opposite characters in movies and can judge whenever a specific behavior is suitable or disgusting. Take a personal experience as an example, I was watching a drama TV series when I was young and it was about betraying two friends that had catastrophic damages on the first role character which I admire. Consequently, I found a feeling of hate inside myself about telling lies to anyone around me.
In conclusion, Movies and television programs can act as a source of entertaining lessons to widespread good behaviors among people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 492, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an indirect way" with adverb for "indirect"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...social problems that teach the audience in an indirect way how to behave in different spaces. You ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13815789474 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74113245447 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615131578947 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7147425204 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8823529412 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8823529412 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242465853464 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637909480277 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687892233947 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135898293292 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0901428719988 0.0645574589148 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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