movies and televisions strongly influence the way people behave.do you agree or disagree 111111?
In the middle of the cold war 33th America's president harry s Truman started a new method for overcoming it's arch rival soviet union. This method now a days called propaganda which means altering the way of thinking and reasoning of society with the help of public media. while some politicians denied that method, new evidences admit the effects of propaganda. In my view I think movie and televisions have many impacts on peoples mind and behavior for two vital reasons.
Firstly, justifying the use of nuclear power in the 1960 is a good example. Television on that time was bombarding public mind with the positive aspects of nuclear experiments. They declared that this new achievement can be used as a new treatment for cancer and related disorders. Hence, they filled the public mind with that which led to more investment on nuclear power project specially hydrogenic bomb as a new tool against soviet union. But the point is some years later experiments state that there is not any positive relationship between nuclear treatment of cancer. This is a famous example about propaganda and the hidden leverage of television and media which can alter the public mind effectively.
Secondly, media and movies specially can impact on the mental and physical quality of life of the people strongly. Evidences show that , teenagers whom spend more than 3 hours of day for movies and television , are at the risk of onset depression , anxiety and other mental disorders. The reason is movies focus on their superstars whom have outstanding beauty and body shape , so the juvenile will envy the actor and his or her self esteem will be decreased enormously and low self esteem is the corner stone of many mental disorders.
In conclusion, from my point of view television and movies can effect strongly on public mind and behavior with two main methods which are showing the positive sides of a dangerous and wrong project more than its negative ones and with investing on superstars and good looking actors.so I recommend do not believe every thing on the television.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, i think, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97982708934 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62261196557 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559077809798 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.494637061 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.428571429 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7857142857 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117930843051 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0400574091092 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439850787903 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0754977233188 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292129745281 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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