Museums and art galleries should concentrate on works that show history and culture of their own country rather than works of other parts in the world. Do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age, museums and art galleries do a wide range of surveys in order to decide which type of work they should exhibit to meet the need of the general public. It is reported that people divide their perspectives into two different kinds. Some people say that museums and galleries should focus on the works that show history and culture of their own countries, while others suggest including works of other parts in the world. I lean on the latter opinion due to these rational reasons.
First of all, museums and galleries need to display works of other parts in the world to enlarge viewers’ horizons. Most of the people who come to museums have the purpose of enjoying art as well as beauty, which is not assembled through nations. Therefore, works should not be limited to be displayed just because they do not originate from the host country. Moreover, that citizens only care for the information, specifically art works, of their own country might prevent their knowledge about updating news. This situation is not different from learning science. It is obvious that students have to study scientific rules and laws which were proved by the foreign scientists; thereby, why should international artworks be different? To sum up, museums and galleries should display works of other countries to help widen their citizen knowledge beyond the boundaries.
Secondly, exhibiting works of other countries is also a means to consolidate patriotism along with culture enrichment. By showing citizens the masterpieces of other countries, galleries aid to propaganda people to raise their awareness of protecting their own artworks so that they can make their valuable works match played with the great powers. Furthermore, artworks, as mentioned, contain historical symbols and culture of a country. As a result, people, especially teenagers, have the chance of joining hands to enrich their country’s culture by absorbing the elite factors of other countries. Ho Chi Minh, the first president of my country, once claimed in the Declaration of Independence that citizens’ responsibility was not only inheriting and developing the traditions but also expanding them.
In conclusion, people should continuously widen their horizon of the world as well as make an attempt to raise their patriotism and culture expansion. By that, museums and galleries where works of countries from over the world are displayed will be used as tools to buttress citizens to reach the goals.
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... buttress citizens to reach the goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, as to, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2093.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21945137157 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77988317188 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536159600998 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6785699105 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.277777778 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94444444444 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438805193762 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131165562657 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118210215402 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284758401585 0.150856017488 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711560264038 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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