Nowadays people are more willing to help the people who they don t know For example giving food and clothes to the people who need them than they were in the past

From my own perspective, I agree with the statement that modern people are more likely to help strangers who are in need than ever. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will illuminate in the following essay.

Firstly, with the improvement of average living conditions, the number of people who can help others without sacrificing their own lives is increasing. Most people in the past had low-quality lives. Most families depended on farming or hunting since there were rare employment opportunities that could offer a decent salary. In contrast, with the development of social productivity, more and more people could obtain jobs offering a generous salary, which makes it possible that they could afford to help the poor. My experience is a compelling example of the argument. I participated in a bunch of volunteering activities during my college years. Since I was a computer science student, it was effortless for me to find a part-time job. And I could earn scholarships because of my excellent academic performance. Consequently, I was not worried about my own life so that it seemed no reason for me to refuse to help strangers. I donated thousands of money and clothes to remote village districts in China.

Secondly, with the proliferation of the Internet, people are more likely to help others. I do not believe current people are superior to people in the past. People did not help others due to the deficiency of convenient means of understanding others' terrible situations or offering assistance. On the other hand, modern people could quickly realize that many human beings urge some help via the marvelous Internet. Besides, the invention of online payment removes the barrier that restricts people from offering their hands. For instance, I found a young girl with a terrible disease on the Internet. Fortunately, she was in the early stage of that illness. The only difficulty her family was facing was that they could not afford the expensive surgery fee. However, at least ten thousand people, including me, donated money to this poor little girl because of a donation system that provides online payment. I am certain she has already been away from the pain of disease and led a happy life with the help of the Internet. Therefore I strongly believe it is the advent of technology that enables people to offer more assistance than people did in the past.

In conclusion, I wholeheartedly support the opinion that people are more willing to help others than they were in the past due to their carefree personal life and the invention of the Internet.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, at least, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2153.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9837962963 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80796006086 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.039487666 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7083333333 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357717035087 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952373263927 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0903909929252 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243541712504 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295156122947 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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