o you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
As the world becomes increasingly civilized, there is a competition between people who wants to be successful in their personal lives. Due to this fact, each individual tries to do plans, which lead him to achieve goals. many people deem that in this day and age it is really difficult for youth to make some changes in their own personal life, on the other hand most of people hold an opposite view that nowadays young people are not depended on their parents. Although, not surprisingly, number of controversies over the issue is overwhelming , actually , I concur with people who believe that today adolescents are independent. I will delve the most outstanding reasons in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with , the first important point to be mentioned is that in this century parents believe in their children. nowadays parents recognize the abilities of young people , and allow them to enhance their proficiencies, which will help them in their future career. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, my parents notice that I am keen on musical instruments , therefore they allowed me to participate in competition,which was really great experience for me. Consequently , till this day I continue with this proficiency.
Another vital reason that should be highlighted here is support of our parents both morally and financially. today education is a way to success, and parents wants us to be successful in our personal lives. therefore, they do not spare their money for us. furthermore they support us at any situation, even though if we did something incorrect. For instance , when my grandmother was a young girl her father banned her to study and she got married to a person , whom she does not know.For this reason I can surely say that nowadays we are more independent than young people was in the past.
In light of all aforementioned reasons, it is explicitly obvious that n this day and age we are free to making own decisions, furthermore we have many opportunities, chances, which we, young people, should use for the right way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, first, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98033707865 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97026685789 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575842696629 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9564393645 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.8125 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288854121415 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083741050402 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802639157522 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168003845599 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607375073517 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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