Older teenagers (16-19) should be allowed to work at paid part-time jobs.
Nowadays, there are kinds of jobs which make a variety of opportunities for people. In this regard, we should consider younger persons who want to experience works in their lives. But, there is a question asking these men or women should have a chance to try a part-time job or not. I agree with the opinion which is expressing taking part in labors which are flexible in time is a good decision for these young individuals. The reasons to substantiate my idea are explored in the following.
First of all, the age of 16 to 19 is a proper time to find an interesting area and working could aid people to reach this goal. To be specific, a person who has enough experience in his passion is more successful in the future than a guy who becomes aware of his route at the age of 20 to 25. Surely, understanding our way strongly affects our prospect to be a prosperous man. A personal experience of min can drive this fact home. I have been developing a company in computer science for several years. When I was 17 years old I got familiar with computers especially Machine Learning because I have to prepare some projects for a man who was the boss of the electrical institute and had supported me to work there 2 days a week. Now, I have better knowledge than my coworkers because I had started to study these types of lessons, so soon. This example demonstrates the importance of finding purpose at the youth.
Second, children and young humans should learn how to manage their money and they cannot realize the worth of cash until they earn it. To put on the other hand, a young son who faces a lot of difficulties to obtain a reward never pays it for bad productions. Certainly, let a boy have a part-time job allow him to learn these lessons and help their parent to train their kids. As an illustration, I am going to speak about my little brother who used to waste his money on games, until, my father compelled him to have his job. Because he was a student, he had to find a job with the ability to change the times. After a while, he did not spend his money on games because he found the value of money. If my father never had made him have a job, he would not realize this concept.
By and large, I agree to work as a part-time for young persons. Since it aids them to find their goals also youth can understand the hardness of obtaining money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 66, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... work as a part-time for young persons. Since it aids them to find their goals also y...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, by and large, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37129840547 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53179203146 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564920273349 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2311701424 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2272727273 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9545454545 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148144155988 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0417929294894 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537595265547 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0957262612511 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320677316449 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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