One of the most challenge problems in modern society is to have the
most up-to-date skills for workplace. For solving this, government
decides to give all adults over the age of 25 a training course to
learn new skills. Do you think it is an effective way for government
to spend its money?
Without a shadow of a doubt, economics plays a pivotal role in a country's vanity and indicates its rank in the world. Not only a country's economy is a showcase for it and its society, but it also has other tremendous implications on various facets. Therefore, the factors contributing to the economy should always catch up with the economic trend, and that needs, acquiring new skills necessary in different workplaces. I firmly believe that the government should provide opportunities for grown-ups to learn new skills and be up to date. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will develop these ideas through two compelling reasons.
First and foremost, making such a circumstance conducive to gaining sufficient knowledge required for the workplace benefits the job applicants by forming the rudiment expertise for the open positions. Needless to say, the more knowledgeable the people looking for a job are, the better the professional level of a workplace becomes. Hence, helping people learn basic instructions in new fields and novel skills seeds the plant of a prosperous work, which eventually develops the whole country's economy. In addition, it alleviates the obstacles of being thoroughly amateurish by letting people experience a subtle sample of the new environment and new skills and allows new employees not to start their work from square zero. My experience is a compelling example of this. Back two years ago, there was a program held by our university with the financial support of the government, and it was intended to teach students the programming language of Python owing to its significant importance in the marketplace. As a result of attending that class, I learned an entirely new field which not only did help me find a suitable occupation but also diluted my stress level for entering an inexperienced atmosphere. Furthermore, it helps employers manipulate the courses as they think it is better to know at a job.
Another reason to be mentioned is that holding various courses for new skills ameliorates the average knowledge of the people. As a result, there will be an escalation in the academic level of society. Although being occupied with a job in the learned field is the best option, not working on that specific skill does not mean this plan is not effective, owing to the fact that all of the attendees of the classes have gained informative experiences that could be used in other ways, such as teaching the skills to new people and passing those to new generations. For example, if an individual does not succeed in a job, they can be a teacher in the field instead. It is clear to see why funding these programs by the government is of great importance and has a myriad of impacts on both society and each individual's life.
Reflecting all the reasons mentioned above, I strongly think that the government should devise programs in order to help adults to keep in tune with new skills required in the workplace.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 378, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...s not effective, owing to the fact that all of the attendees of the classes have gained in...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 805, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...iad of impacts on both society and each individuals life. Reflecting all the reasons menti...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, so, therefore, for example, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2459.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97773279352 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89786148282 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53036437247 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.8546571833 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.421052632 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73684210526 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251202431737 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745443224125 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581684745779 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156408614141 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0144777503113 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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