One of the most challenge problems in modern society is to have the most up-to-date skills for workplace. For solving this, government decides to give all adults over the age of 25 a training course to learn new skills. Do you think it is an effective way for government to spend its money?
Conflicts will arise whenever government’s decisions have been conducts regarding the problem of education.
In the recent years, there is a voice that the government should offer courses to adults over the age of 25 for improving their specific skills.
Some people approve with this idea because they believe this measure could help people catch up the development of society.
However, this method has a series of issues that should be emphasis.
In my view, it is a useless way.
To begin with, emphasis should be placed on what has been suggested in the famous saying “Interest is the best teacher”.
Indeed, interest helps people learn efficient and accomplish a better result.
Undeniably, interest could be seen as the first step toward one’s success.
Therefore, it is not the government’s responsibility to spend money on the adult’s education.
Those who want to get novel skills and accumulate unknown knowledge ought to pay for these courses by their salary.
Moreover, if the government allocates the educational resource to people , it hardly to be efficient because the needs of different person is unclear.
Through a market economic method, the resource allocation process will become more efficient.
Furthermore, few of adults have the energy to engage in these courses.
In today’s society, modern citizens have endless matters and huge pressure.
Early in the morning, they have to struggle out of the bed, just to catch the buses to the office.
A short mid break only allows them to take a simple lunch, which may includes some unhealthy food like KFC.
After a tiring work day, they need to return home and spend the free time with their children and parents.
Evidently, urban people are hardly to spend time on these training courses.
They ought to use their free time efficiently with their family and friends, which could help them reduce the pressure of working.
In my view, the government could encourage people to learn new technologies by ensure the 8-hours works environment.
The government could complete related laws and regulations to limit the working time.
Therefore, workers could obtain more time which could be used by themselves.
If people have enough free time, I believe that some of them are willing to learn new things which can improve themselves.
Furthermore, it will form a positive circle because the advanced skills will help people work efficient.
This is a better method than just spend money on adult’s education.
Consequently, there are more side effects lying under the suggestion of spending money on adult’s courses.
The government ought to use other methods to give ordinary people more opportunities in learning.
After all, no one could deny that learning more useful knowledge could paves the way to success.
People would like to receive new things if they have enough energy and time.
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Suggestion: ,
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Message: Did you mean 'economical' (=affordable, cheap)?
Suggestion: economical
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'pave'
Suggestion: pave
...at learning more useful knowledge could paves the way to success. People would like...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, after all, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2508.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38197424893 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79961533375 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525751072961 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.4545829022 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.4827586207 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0689655172 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27586206897 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 29.0 4.53405017921 640% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162448881287 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044781744761 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433997933959 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.044781744761 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433997933959 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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