One of the most challenge problems in modern society is to have the most up-to-date skills for workplace. For solving this, government decides to give all adults over the age of 25 a training course to learn new skills. Do you think it is an effective way for government to spend its money?
When it comes to governments, there are a lot of projects or plans requiring funds support. therefore, supporting adults over 25 years to take training courses could be an option. In my opinion, I do not agree with this statement. I do not think it is an effective way to spend money. The reasons for my taking this position are as follows.
To begin with, offering training courses for adults to learn new skills for their careers is not the government’s obligation. In other words, adults should take their own responsibility to catch up with new skills to adapt to fast world-changing. For example, my friend, John, is a software engineer at the leading technology company in taiwan. For this position, he has to build up and maintain websites for their customers. However, it is not quite simple for him. In this modern society, there are a lot of hacking techniques advancing every day. he has to follow up the new types of attacking skills to ensure his customers’ data safe and not leaking. this is just one type of job. there are a lot of different jobs in the world. therefore, it is impossible for governments to offer several types of courses for different jobs.
Furthermore, the necessity of courses for all adults over 25 years to learn new skills is unclear. To be more specific, some people may lack the motivation to catch up with new techniques because they do not need it. they are able to keep jobs or survive without following up the advanced skills. The fundamental education could be a good example. In taiwan, there are a lot of children in remote areas. they may not have a chance to learn new knowledge or study. As we know, they are not knowledgeable to survive in the future without any fundamental studies. Compared with spending money on adults over 25 years who have the ability to gain knowledge and make money, it is more urged for children to get more educational resources. Thus, I think governments allocates funds for training courses for adults is ineffective.
To sum up, governments should evaluate the necessity of training courses for adults and avoid exceeding their obligation. In other words, adults over 25 years can survive and raise themselves up. therefore, the supporting the training courses for them is ineffective way to spend money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, i think, of course, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91370558376 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85591533762 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479695431472 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.718065283 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.7037037037 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5925925926 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386843323031 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10608139761 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830206611992 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244836526253 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0193507190502 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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