one should get news about events from around the world or should not
Whether a person chooses to be informed about and influenced by news from around the world depend to a great extent on the lens through which one is looking at their social responsibilities. While many prefer to be aware of every event even on the global scale, and subsequently, react to it, others might favor being kept in the dark until necessary. I agree with the latter, and I believe it is not essential to stay informed and updated on happening around the universe if it is not infuential on our own lives. I will demonstrate further as follows.
Firstly, although it is an appreciated trait to be caring and concerned about everyone and everywhere, it can be significantly burdening and exhausting on a person's mind. In my opinion, seeking the truth and awareness at any cost can only be as necessary as it is practical. Thus, obtaining information that is not effective in my own life, and especially bad news that I cannot do anything about, serves no purpose other than hurting my mental health. Additionally, as I believe in the tremendous effects of a peaceful mind on a person's everyday proper functioning, I would not jeopridize my current stable state and good performance, just to attain insignificant information. For instance, I struggle very hard to maintain my calm and happy mood all day long because I have a previous depression background. However, whenever I visit my parents, as they are watching global news on television all day, and the news is mostly composed of saddening events rather than joyful ones, I am always very anxious and on edge when I return home from there.
Secondly, obtaining the wide spectrum of information about occurrences from around the world can be very time-consuming and confusing. In today's busy and competitive world, many people are concentrating all their energy and push themselves beyond their limits to achieve higher degrees in educational and professional paths. As I am aimig to do the same, I believe focusing my time and energy on the news that is not influential on my everyday life is a waste of resources. I would rather spend that time and energy on learning a new skill, a new foreign language, exercise, or even do some leisure activities to enhance my productivity later. For instance, referring to my parent againg, I always encourage them to practice English instead of watching the news as I think it will be more benefitial for them any time in their life.
In conclusion, I desire to maintain my mental health and also concentrate on activities that contribute to my progress educationally and professionally. Therefore, I do not agree that one should gain awareness about everything that is going on around the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 529, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...remendous effects of a peaceful mind on a persons everyday proper functioning, I would no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2252.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91703056769 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01833606259 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548034934498 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.7946371197 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.470588235 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9411764706 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52941176471 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210520028496 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658213753369 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940197860258 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139735988369 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526712955088 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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