little time spent on play or schoolwork
Whether a parent decides to promote a healthy emotional bond or better school grades depends to a great extent on the views of that parent and also the condition a child is in. While some parents might believe educational purposes should be fulfilkled at any price, others might argue that psychological and emotional health of the child is mor significant. I agree with the latter, and I believe if there is limited time to be spent with a child it should be focused on playing and leisure activities. I will demonstrate further as follows.
Firstly, I believe that playing, fun physical activities, sports, and similar actions which can be performed with minimum regard for the outcome, usually contribute greatly to a child's peace of mind. While promoting a sense of safety, being loved, freedom, and control, playing assissts a child in developing an accurate practical perception of themselves and the world around them. Hence, when the child is accompanied by a parent in such a sensitive process, the parent will be able to supervise and discipline the child while simoltaneously forming a strong healthy relationship as their friends. For instance, my mother used to sit beside me when I was playing with dolls in my childhood days, and she corrected and shaped my ideas when I believed that all girls had to wear skirts and have long hair due to the appearance of my dolls. Subsequently, by doing so, she helped me obtain a proper insight about the female gender in today's modern world in addition to making me feel important and loved.
Secondly, our brain, especially at young age, is very prone to making psychological associations. Schoolwork is often something children are rather reluctant to do, in contrast to palying which is almost always desired by children. Although engaging in the child's schoolwork in the limited time a parent has might be beneficial for educational purposes, it puts the parents at risk of being aasociated with something dull and obligatory in the child's mind, and therefore, drawing a distance between the parent and their beloved child. As an example, I can refer to a cousin I have who has an average educational status, but not a very good relationship with his parents. In his childhood, as his parents used to concentrate greatly on his progress at school, he used to run away from them and get anxious when they were around. On the contrary, I believe emotional heath and general happiness of a child can also assist them greatly in climbing up the educational ladder as well.
In conclusion, I believe that when a parent has liitle time to spend with their children it is best to focus that time on activities that are desirable to child and try to guide them through such actions.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to, on the contrary, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88412017167 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78509689636 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534334763948 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.6735153688 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.25 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.125 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8125 5.45110844103 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0981653450645 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0320679002627 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051587561646 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0698974733877 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258111185436 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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